essay for writting class

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I need feed back

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[maria_sputnik]

You're a colorful writer! What kind of feedback are you looking for?

Thank you so much!

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Gramatical errors, miss spellings, places where I'm to wordy, or where I could go into more detail. Things like that. I think, hopefully that I will be getting the chances to elaborate and expand on the argument...Oh, that's another thing. This whole essay was supposed to be a pro con argument but, I don't think it is at all. We'll see I guess from the teacher's feed back.

[maria_sputnik]

I'll do a quick proofing for you. I think it's an interesting essay but I bet your teacher is going to complain that it's not "argumentative" enough (though it seems fairly clear at the end that you're arguing for conservation). It'll probably be easier to email you the proof than to stick it in a comment though.

P.S.

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Thanks for conecting Gabby and I. We've been becoming good friends.