The Best Thing About Mornings

Dec 14, 2008 21:29

The best thing about mornings is if I'm still laughing, I'm still drunk ( Read more... )

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115141164164 December 15 2008, 13:29:56 UTC
*Hallelujah

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buella_pearl December 16 2008, 06:18:58 UTC
This could really benefit from a neater flow. I'm not very helpful because I can't tell you how to get that. Either go all out with the run-ons or reign them in maybe.

I like the juxtaposition of you trying to deflect their judgement while you judge in your sarcasm.

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spazalastic_me December 16 2008, 07:24:07 UTC
yes. I really need to eliminate the judging of them. I don't intend it, but it's like problem with ethnography, i guess. See, this is what I'm looking for, so I can eliminate things like that... and... yeah, probably. there should probably be more to make it smoother. Probably "lies" should go...

thanks! i needed that.

hehe, probably... i should probably get a better word.

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