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[spheralunaris]

 
Five Reasons Why Drosselmeyer Didn't Write The Prince and the Raven

I. Fable

Outside, it is raining and inside the little house at the edge of town, it is also raining but not in the same way; the lamp burns low because they have only so much oil and by its gloom, the old grandmother reads a fairytale to the child.

The story is a happy one

Comments

[web_of]

Its certainly very similar to the poem, but I'm not sure its too similar. I think if you worked a little more with it, changed a few things, expanded it more, etc, it could be really good. The whole idea of it is very intriguing, so I definitely don't think you should give it up.

[spheralunaris]

I think you are right. I was avoiding writing too much since I was trying to imitate Bishop's stanza structure but that I think limited me too much...

[team_fen]

I think... it is very similar, but when I start reading yours, I automatically read it in the narrator voice with the music behind it. I love the lamp and the ravenbook and the mood is mournful and evocative in a way that separates it quite well from the original. However, the grandmother and child don't strike me as any characters in particular, and even with the titles (or especially with), I'm struggling with the overall meaning. I feel like I'm missing something.

I don't know that this is a bad thing, necessarily - it just seems like the start of something that hasn't been revealed yet.

[spheralunaris]

Haha, I think even I don't know quite what I was getting at except for in the most simplistic terms. I think this is an idea that requires more thought and some percolating before I go back to it. But I think I do know I want to title the entire series Death of the Author when I'm done.