from shitty slam poem to awkward prose in thirty seconds flat!

[spinningdizzy]

so, i tried this as a slam(ish) poem, but judging by audience reaction i should probably shelve it. however, i write so rarely that trashing anything would make me convulse (or at least whimper), so i tried to slightly rework it into very short prose. please let me know if i should try to put it back in poem form, continue trying to make it prose

Comments

Nice...

[anonymous]

I like it. Don't know what else to say. You know I'm not much of a literary buff, but I know what I like. Maybe write it in binary and I'll give you my professional opinion. Cau.

-T