Supposedly an Epic Quest

[spiralunbound]

Title: Supposedly an Epic Quest
What: original short story using vincent_kinneas' Jonathan Marinaris and the_firedoor's Eleanor Ingleson and Taje Tuesday and mentioning the_firedoor's Brianna Aberdeen. cheers
Rating: M for too many F words to make PG13
Words: 1800 total
Summary: Ophelia Strike hits Rockquest and everyone's on their own quest for something that ain't rock. Second person

Comments

Can I tell you how amazing this is?

[the_firedoor]

This had me in stitches, seriously! I love it, the whole thing, the way you flip from perspective to perspective at this rapid pace (that matches the pace of the things going on backstage) but nonetheless make the entire thing flow. I've never been behind the scenes with a band before, but I can totally visualize this entire story and it feels so real and thank you for including my characters in it because you did a great job there, too. But my favorite bits were definitely Brendan:

and her tongue is in your mouth and this is probably completely unhygienic but you’ve both had your MeNZB shots at least
he would totally think that and I think it's hysterical.

and - you don’t think I’m gay? practically half my school does, when they’re not calling me a skux, which is ridiculous, and - oh shit, that’s not what I’m trying to say, I’m not gay, and-”-LOVE, LOVE, LOVE

Re: Can I tell you how amazing this is?

[the_firedoor]

Oh, and I also really like that you did this in second person, because that's so hard to do in a story. ^^

Yes, you may

[spiralunbound]

You totally get a prize for being the first to comment on this journal even though I've had it for over a year. XD

Thanks! I've never been backstage with a band actually getting ready before either so this was a bit new to me too. And I was so worried about doing Elle, Taje, and Brianna, so I'm incredibly glad I got something right. :D

Brendan was fun to write. I actually took the "completely unhygienic" bit from a conversation I had once on the pros and cons of making out. XD

Second person is my one true love and I'm glad you liked it because people tend to find it a bit weird. :D

[vincent_kinneas]

...I don't know what to say. I usually use hyperbole or humour when I'm reviewing someone else's fic, but none is coming to mind. So I'll just be blatantly honest, something I've been trying out lately.

I'm completely stunned Caryl. This is simply phenomenal. Second person, as Jess pointed out, is really difficult to do, and you seem to have it mastered. And speaking as Johnny's host, you've got him down perfectly despite how little you've interacted with him. Overall point? This is a magnificent fic. And I can't really add anything to that.

[spiralunbound]

Aw, shucks, that sounds like hyperbole anyway :$

But thanks! Again, I was really worried about writing Johnny so thank god I got it right. :D