Fic: Funfetti, Forty-Fives, and Viral Hemorrhagic Fevers

[spoons1899]

Title: Funfetti, Forty-Fives, and Viral Hemorrhagic Fevers
Characters/Pairing: Sam, Dean, John
Rating: PG13
Word Count: 3,200
Summary: Dean and John go on a hunt, leaving Sam behind with a cold and vocabulary homework. Pre-series.
A/N: Schmoop?! How did that sneak in there?

Comments

[callistosh65]

Oh be still my heart, this is a superb slice of pre-series life. The way you used the vocabulary to structure and reflect what was going on, the scene with Dean and Sam's 'eudaimonia' at the end had me aching, and this....: He gave Sam the comfort and pride of being able to say “I had a Mom who loved The Beatles” and “I had a Mom who liked to go barefoot” and “I had a Mom who could speak a little bit of Spanish and French.” It’s so much better than “I had a Mom who was murdered in my nursery.”... had me bawling.

Gorgeous writing. You schmoop away, okay?

[spoons1899]

Thank you! This fic couldn't seem to make up it's mind of it wanted to be all angsty!Sam or adorable!boys so it went both ways, and I'm glad you liked it.

[saberivojo]

Oh man. I loved this. As far as schmoop, this is the good kind. Well written, beautifully constructed and so damn good. This is the kind of writing I love with the subject being so mundane and yet perfectly Winchester.

I love the resentment of Sam. Not the full on hard core, "I hate my Dad" stuff, but more the normal thirteen year old angst that comes from being left behind. However, that normal thirteen year old has a 45 on the table. The juxtaposition of Sam and homework and Dean and Dad on a hunt is brilliantly stated.

Oh, well done.

[spoons1899]

Thank you very much! I always loved that part of wee!chester Sam. Normal kid, dealing with normal angst, bullies, homework, carries a butterfly knife in his pocket and knows how to kill with it…

[harrigan]

I'm not always in the mood for schmoop, but I'll read anything you write. So I started reading this, and my throat was getting tight and I was all this isn't schmoop! This is heartbreaking. Quietly. With just a sprinkle of schmoop at the end.

Which is really how I like my schmoop the best!

[spoons1899]

Thank you very much. The schmoop just caught me off guard cause it's not my normal thing, but then I couldn't seem to stop the little boys from being adorable. I was practically whacking them with a stick to keep them from cuddling.

[hsifeng]

I love the way you thread your stories together with some internal reference point; the countdown on Dean’s cross-roads deal, Sam’s vocab words, etc. They make great anchors and add just the right emphasis to give more insight into the main characters POV. Brava honey, you are becoming a finely honed instrument for translating how this family ticks.

He hates the thought that his mother probably realized he wasn’t worth it once she died.

Oh Sammy…

”Then, at the end of the day, when Sam crashed and was lying on the couch with his head on Dean’s lap and his feet trailing on the floor, Dean gave him his real present. He talked about Mom.”

Oh Dean…

And then everyone is home, and everything is all right. Or at least as right as it needs to be.

Thank you.

[flawlessglitch]

God I love baby Sammy...pre-series holds my heart and I totally adored this.

Great job <3