Comments | sprysemantics: "The Sun and the Glass"

sprysemantics

"The Sun and the Glass"

Mar 23, 2006 03:28

(This is an odd, beatniky thing that I concocted while in WI. As of late it has taken on new meaning. It's supposed to be read out loud, so if you would like to help a brother out, read it to yourself, let the words wash over you, and let me know what you think... and if you have nothing good to say... say it! I love critisism...Try to find the ( Read more... )

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ryanthrowsrocks March 23 2006, 21:30:49 UTC

your grasp on imagery and metaphors is really very captivating. i'm intrigued. i wish i could write like this, but as of late writer's block has completely destroyed me.

dirtyb33 March 23 2006, 22:26:13 UTC

i started reading this without looking at the screen name, assuming it was my friend amy from school who is an english major.

if you have a beat for it, then write it in poem form, not paragraphs you jackass. ;-)

i love you.

sprysemantics March 23 2006, 22:39:40 UTC

Ah, but isn't it more fun when you have to work it out on your own? muah ha ha! thanks for the feedback fellas.

altrockfuckup March 24 2006, 05:00:34 UTC

the last paragraph is my favorite ("be afraid and upset . . . systematically erased". i read it out loud over and over.

there is a store 24 about a block and a half from my dorm, so i walk there a lot at night. tonight i was on my way there and i had flashbacks of us walking to 24 last year.

i have such respect for you. i probably don't say that enough.

sprysemantics March 25 2006, 19:25:27 UTC

I miss you man. Summer is around the corner, and new memories are waiting to be made. I'm so proud of you, and the man that you have become through such turmoil. Easy does it, my old friend.