an official Week One entry

[squarebluefish]

A response to one of the activities for Kate Chopin's The Story of an Hour. A little creative license used in answering the question. But that's what we're here for, right?
(Definitely a 15 minute job, hoo-boy)

Grace thought things that would make people sick. If everyone knew the kind of things she thought, she wouldn't just be out of friends and

Comments

[squarebluefish]

Well, thank you Kaite! Perhaps lovely commenting that feeds my delicate-as-a-flower, can't-handle-criticism ego will spur me to actually CATCH UP WITH YOU!
And well, I wasn't a great fan of that piece. I don't know why. We're meant to annotate our textbooks and we get marked on it but all I could do was underline "...creeping out of the sky..." because I liked the phrase. The only other annotation I could add would be "BORED!"
But maybe I'll try out The Awakening, see if I like that any better.

[deliriums_fish]

1. Question, not criticism. Why is her mother "sainted"? Can you expand on that?
2. " She was just glad, in the morning, that it wasn't her who called the shots." I really like this.

[squarebluefish]

1. What a good point. That kind of jumped in there as I was typing. I wanted to emphasise, without going into any detail about her character really, that Grace's mother was a fine person and what everyone would call a good mother. But, now that you mention it, I think it works better minus the 'sainted'. Thanks!

2. Thought you might (glad you do).

[deliriums_fish]

1. Believe me, I'm hugely guilty of the insertion of adjectives without much thought, you've read my writing. It's easier to pick it out in others than it is in your own. Because I really never did doubt that Grace's mother was a good person. I think it's up to you to leave it in or take it out, I just wanted to know if there was a special reason her mother could be dubbed sainted. Like maybe she spent time reading to dying people or something. (Maybe she did.)

2. I do.

3. This is a special piece of work because I think everyone can identify with it. I don't know of anyone who hasn't imagined their reaction when their parents or loved ones die.

Glad to see some of your Uni work, it makes me proud a million miles away.

[squarebluefish]

This comment deserves an equally awesome one in response but I'm getting on MSN now anyway and just wanted to say - icon love. Natascha makes everything artistic.

[michaelgriffith]

Yes we are here to develop our "creative license"... I think this is a powerful internal description that captures the complexity of so many of our responses to the tiny details that impinge on our receptors... well done Angela
MG