she makes a reapperance

May 15, 2009 01:42

Written a few months ago in my not!commonplace book ( Read more... )

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deliriums_fish May 14 2009, 16:16:20 UTC
Once again, I love your last line "But mainly she saw that who she was couldn't tell her who she is."
And sometimes that's a good thing.

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squarebluefish May 14 2009, 16:23:27 UTC
Yay. I hate last lines. I generally suck at them. So getting last line validation makes me a happy bunny, FANK YOU MARCY!

THAT icon, I like.

I am so tired. COMMENT ON THE OTHER THING SO I CAN SLEEP! <3

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schnoogle May 17 2009, 10:52:52 UTC
I like this, but I am lame and can't elaborate any further. ♥

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squarebluefish May 19 2009, 14:05:52 UTC
Lover you, Vicki. NOT LAME. Just... limping a little :P

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rosiephillips May 19 2009, 10:23:22 UTC
Hey Angela,
This piece of writing is truly ingenious. The way in which you write is so descriptive, emotive and sensitive. The way you make dull objects and such simple tasks sound so alive by way of your expression is so incredible.
I do not know if you have done this on purpose, but the way you write about the girl makes the reader feel immense empathy for her and what she is going through. I would really like to read more from you, if it is all like this. Well done!

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squarebluefish May 19 2009, 14:20:47 UTC
Thanks, Rosie. There's only one other Grace ficlet, back a few entries. Let me look - here. And the only other one that's worth a look at is a first person thing with no real title - here. But it *is* just pointless romantic angst, the type of thing that only holds meaning to the person writing it.

Ah well, c'est la vie. We can't be good at everything.

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michaelgriffith June 13 2009, 05:49:30 UTC
I like very much the way you use your writing to stand back -as it were- and dramatize your own creative possibilities. This is clearly one way of doing it. And it gives you a real freedom in your choice of images. So is "Grace" coming together in some larger genre?
Thanks for your efforts in LJ
MG

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