Numbers Racket

[sr_m_grammatica]

I tried this once before on VJB and didn't get much of a response.  Let's have another go, shall we

Comments

[ein_myria]

Eek! This is beginning to look like an entry for Godawful Fan Fiction.

[sr_m_grammatica]

Oh, thank you, my child, for the journal reference (Godawful Fan Fiction)! Most cringe-inducing! I was so thankful to see that none of Sister's own stuff was posted there.

SMG

[ki_finn]

I'd try Siter but there's no way I can top your Star Trek line.

[sr_m_grammatica]

Thank you, my child! I wish I could take credit for the idea, which Sister has blatantly stolen from somewhere. But the Voyager references were easy.

SMG, who must now see her confessor

[ralst]

'Kathryn Janeway stood there, naked.'

Well, it gives me shivers, and not the good kind *g*

[sr_m_grammatica]

Poor Katie Scarlett O'Janeway.

[sr_m_grammatica]

First of all, "Now, what?" isn't so bad. But the other two--are you seriously saying that these are actual first lines you've seen? Oh, dear. The "sad orbs" is truly eye-(or orb?)-rollingly bad. But the second one! Nothing like getting all the exposition into the first exceptionally long run-on sentence, is there?

Who is next?

SMG

[ki_finn]

Sister, Sister I have one. The sailboat glided across the lake precisely the way a bowling ball wouldn't.

[sr_m_grammatica]

Oh, that is eye-rollingly bad! Well done, my child!

Any other takers?

SMG