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standgale December 15 2011, 09:26:39 UTC
constructive criticism welcome...
gosh I'm tired, so I understand if you're tired too and don't have much to say today.
I started writing this story differently, but even I got bored, which obviously was a very bad sign. But I liked the little boy at the start so I made him a story for himself.
This would be the second entry of mine presenting a different way of dealing with death, that's interesting.
Sleepy time.

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jacq22 December 16 2011, 05:30:57 UTC
I like the way it rounded out in the end, with the grandmother and grandson both joined in a love of laughter. Gentle story, and a look at another culture. I too have been so tired lately!! must be all the build up to festive season.

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standgale December 20 2011, 20:31:17 UTC
Thank you, I'm glad the grandmother-grandson seemed to complete the story. My original idea didn't include that, and the story didn't really go anywhere but I had nothing else. Then the grandmother revealed herself and the story all seemed to come together. I love ... experiencing this writing thing, the process is so interesting.

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lawchicky December 16 2011, 21:02:02 UTC
I love stories about grandmother relationships- well done!

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standgale December 20 2011, 20:33:50 UTC
thanks!
(I don't actually have a grandmother relationship myself, unfortunately. )

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basric December 17 2011, 03:04:47 UTC
I think it was well written, I enjoyed.

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standgale December 20 2011, 20:34:11 UTC
thanks, I'm glad you liked it .

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myrna_bird December 17 2011, 23:46:10 UTC
It's nice that Tommy inherited his grandmothers disposition!

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standgale December 20 2011, 20:35:23 UTC
thanks. I hope he can keep hold of it as he grows up (well, imaginarily)

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