Comments | stargate_las: Round 1 // Challenge 8

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Round 1 // Challenge 8 - RESULTS

Jan 16, 2011 18:16

.... and here are the results!

( Results )

!results, !round: #1, !round one - challenge 8

Comments 42

QUESTIONS? needtakehave January 16 2011, 23:19:39 UTC

QUESTIONS?

Re: QUESTIONS? cyren_2132 January 16 2011, 23:56:30 UTC

Feedback please

Re: QUESTIONS? needtakehave January 16 2011, 23:57:15 UTC

This goes under the 'VOTE FEEDBACK' comment I made :)

Re: QUESTIONS? cyren_2132 January 17 2011, 00:00:56 UTC

Sorry, I had major read-fail apparently. I was too busy flailing.

VOTE FEEDBACK needtakehave January 16 2011, 23:20:14 UTC

VOTE FEEDBACK

Re: VOTE FEEDBACK cyren_2132 January 17 2011, 00:01:52 UTC

In the right space now...feedback, please. :)

Re: VOTE FEEDBACK quenne January 17 2011, 00:19:06 UTC

Feedback, please.

Re: VOTE FEEDBACK traycer_ January 17 2011, 04:32:06 UTC

Feedback please and thank you! :)

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cyren_2132 January 17 2011, 00:02:17 UTC

Oh, my goodness. I spent the whole time I was writing this pretty much tearing out my hair and yelling "There are too many words!!! Daniel can't go from uncomfortably angsty to 'I kiss you now!' in 2.5 seconds!" But...apparently he can. :) Thanks for the votes, guys. I'll of course be reading the feedback that was submitted, but I'm also open to a back-and-forth here, if you want.

helenkacan January 17 2011, 00:19:28 UTC

::giggles::

Are you still flailing?

Well, even though you'll get my "official" comments from The Big M (aka mod, hee), I just wanted to address your Daniel can't go from uncomfortably angsty to "I kiss you now!" in 2.5 seconds!

After all, remember this is Daniel we're talking about, the fastest mouth and brain other than Rodney McKay (so ... like ... one per galaxy, right?). He'll already have gone through several conversations and potential outcomes in his brain, even as he's speaking to Jack.

And I really like the idea that, after an entire evening of talking about how his life WAS, with a merging of reality and fantasy further blurred by the love from his teammates, he ends up showing how he'd like his life to BE.

cyren_2132 January 17 2011, 08:30:58 UTC

I like the idea of Daniel constantly running scenarios. Thanks!

helenkacan January 17 2011, 08:38:27 UTC

Hey, I can consistently find a reason to hand-wave ANY action of Daniel's.

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quenne January 17 2011, 00:21:04 UTC

If anyone would be willing to give crit or comments, I'd appreciate it. Thanks!

maniacalshen January 17 2011, 02:02:45 UTC

I wrote, "Bahaha, Atlantis personnel WOULD take a game of assassin way too far!" I was thoroughly amused by your fic. Especially by poor, put-upon Woolsey. :)

quenne January 17 2011, 16:39:47 UTC

Thanks! I was thinking of the idea of war games, like synecdochic's fic, but comedy is tough to pull off in so few words. I'm glad someone liked it. :)

cyren_2132 January 17 2011, 08:28:14 UTC

Parts of this were really adorable and amused me, but I had a hard time accepting the premise that these trained professionals would let paintball get so all-consuming (I know, I know. It's comedy, and I should relax). But also, no Ronon! I can't quite decide if Ronon would be really into paintball, or if he wouldn't see the point of splattering each other with paint, but his absence was conspicuous.

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traycer_ January 17 2011, 13:30:00 UTC

If you're willing, I'm interested in hearing any feedback regarding my story, Unexpected Consequences. Thanks!

maniacalshen January 17 2011, 15:05:08 UTC

I thought it was a nice bit of action writing. :)

traycer_ January 17 2011, 23:54:00 UTC

Thanks! :)

majorsamfan January 17 2011, 16:13:55 UTC

I liked the story, especially snarky Jack/Daniel banter (always) and especially that it was the reverse of the norm - that Jack had thought it would be a nice planet to visit (which is Daniel's usual role) and Daniel snarking about how badly it turned out ( ... )

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