An interesting pairing...egad, the ending was so cute! Then again, Florina/anyone is always cute...
I like the fic, though you did miss a few typos here and there such as 'the scent of hair hit his face and smiled'
I like the fic because it's short and sweet, in simplistic language so it's a short and relaxing read. I personally felt that the most sweetest line was 'Florina just smiled, that slight, hint of a smile that pulled him in'.
The apostrophe in the above line is not necessary though unless you were going to say something else? I'm not particularly sure how you could improve it, but perhaps in the scene where Florina gets hit by the archer, you could add a sentence or two describing her wounds? Or just mention it briefly, since a long description is just a waste of words.
I'm glad you felt it was simple and easy to read; that's what I was going for. I think that kind of language fits the characters.
And yes, I'm terrible with typos. XD I'm not sure what you mean by the apostrophe though? It's not in the original line? I see your point about adding a line about the wounds though, I think it'll hit Sain a little more.
This was a gift-fic actually. I don't write FE7, but the person I was writing for loved FE7. I'm more or less indifferent to Sain/Florina, but I think they could be a cute pair. I prefer Sain/Fiora and Hector/Florina, actually. XD
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I like the fic, though you did miss a few typos here and there such as 'the scent of hair hit his face and smiled'
I like the fic because it's short and sweet, in simplistic language so it's a short and relaxing read. I personally felt that the most sweetest line was 'Florina just smiled, that slight, hint of a smile that pulled him in'.
The apostrophe in the above line is not necessary though unless you were going to say something else? I'm not particularly sure how you could improve it, but perhaps in the scene where Florina gets hit by the archer, you could add a sentence or two describing her wounds? Or just mention it briefly, since a long description is just a waste of words.
I'm curious, why do you like Sain/Florina?
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I'm glad you felt it was simple and easy to read; that's what I was going for. I think that kind of language fits the characters.
And yes, I'm terrible with typos. XD I'm not sure what you mean by the apostrophe though? It's not in the original line? I see your point about adding a line about the wounds though, I think it'll hit Sain a little more.
This was a gift-fic actually. I don't write FE7, but the person I was writing for loved FE7. I'm more or less indifferent to Sain/Florina, but I think they could be a cute pair. I prefer Sain/Fiora and Hector/Florina, actually. XD
Thanks for all the comments too! <3
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