Halo mis-hallow

[starpinguwhoa]

This morning I awoke to the harsh murmer of my alarm clock. With the tip of my progressively aging finger I shut it off and decended beneath my 100 thread count egyption cotton sheets. I hadn't felt this good in days, or even years. As I childishly tossed and turned in my bed, slowly venturing through the maze of blankets, my toes peeked out as I

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[redundant_me]

my favorite part of this is the break in the story from the last two paragraphs. the rest of the story has this perfect flow from scene to scene, and then there is an abrupt jump, which fits so well with what has happened. no explanation of being outside, no explanation of what happens after she slams the door to the apartment, just this perfect jump to the cemetery.

[starpinguwhoa]

:-) thanks Julie. I appriciate the feedback. Hmm its sometimes just so hard to make myself focus an write. But I feel so much better when I do lol