Getting out of Hell - 5 (and done)

[steve_ski]

This is it  - Very first story I've ever written and actually managed to complete it.  Not all that great but not all that bad either I think

Ryan enters the kitchen looking for Kirsten. Kirsten said she was going to give Sandy a call and then get him something but the call must be taking a lot longer than she thought. He hoped things were ok with

Comments

[chrisear]

great story thanx....
"kristen" is a bit confusing, but I can get used to it

[60schic]

You're right, this wasn't bad at all. One thing though that you have to correct right away is what chrisear's comment above alluded to: The character's name is "Kirsten", not "Kristen".

Because I think you have potential, I'm telling you that there are things you could do to improve your writing, the first of which is to get a beta reader to help you with editing. It takes away from the pleasure of reading a fic when there is obvious missing punctuation and word misuse (for example, a few your/you're errors)

You should continue to write! I'd love for you to explore how Seth juggles his responsibilities to his child, his baby mama, and Ryan.

[steve_ski]

Thanks for the comment and thanks for the clarification on spelling. It went right by me the first time. Believe I caught them all now.

Like your suggestion. Although ideas will be hard to come up with since I don't have kid experience but now that you've put it in my head who knows....

As to beta, how do you go about finding one?

[60schic]

You could try posting on your journal to ask for one. I know if you post on fanfiction.net, there is a place to ask for one on that site but I don't know if LJ has that service. Or, if you find an author you like, whose stories you have read and perhaps commented on, you can try asking one of them if they'd be willing.