College Experiences: A Memoir

[sticks86]

Here is portions from my memior, if you would leave some feedback... what you like/didn't like, how I could make it better, etc. [One thing I must say is that some names have been changed for their privacy

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good job

[suchadisaster]

that's pretty good!! maybe some day if i'm really bored and you let me, i'd like to read the whole thing?!?!

<3 lenny

hmm

[anonymous]

hi sticks86 ha that rhymes! I was just reading random journals when i happened to come across yours. Please don't take offense to this but what you have here sounds like an essay you wrote for english class. It does not sound polished at all and I know this is a rough rough rough draft. I don't see how you can turn this section into an entire book. It sounds too much like a journal entry. but then so people do publish their journals. You could try for that but as for memoris i think you might want to wait till you finish college than maybe start it. I think you will have a better perspective at the end of 4 years than your freshman year. but again this just sounds so much like a english paper and if i picked up this book and this was the first thing i read i would not want to buy it. it doesnt really draw me into what you are trying to say. sure you had an intersting first year at college so what a lot of people do. focus on facts that are interesting that will draw people to want to read about your life. if you are serious about