Carcass

[stinky_horowitz]

Okay, I need to write more, in training for November.  I've referred to this zombie plot bunny numerous times in various places. I'm going to declare it dead, and maybe now it will leave me in peace, instead of sneaking into comments.

Rating:  I declare this PG-13, for ninja-induced death scenes.
Genre:  Angst
Summary:  Kakashi brings a problem home

Comments

[rabid_fangrrl]

Killing kids wasn't so hard for Kakashi back in the day...But his ANBU gear doesn't fit anymore,
This section was - pardon my language - fucking excellent. I love how when you read through it all at once, the beginning of the last sentence is just....brutal and at the same time poetic. That beginning line of the last sentence is incredible in the way that it can be read as literal and figurative. Killer!

I love how Kakashi can't get away from comparing this assignment to the team he was guiding. The fact that the kids still sort of pervade his thought processes is just awesome conveyed in how you chose to convey it.

He wants to protect this girl, not kill her because some daimyo decided she's in the way. But that's the mission. And it's too dark to read Icha Icha in the meantime, goddammit.
Pow! Sucker-punch to the emotions! ::uff!::

And the last time Kakashi spoke to Sasuke, he tried too hard and it all came out sounding exactly like his father. Which makes him want to scratch his face offWord choice = excellent. Scratch

[stinky_horowitz]

Oh no. NEVER apologize for a comment that good. You are so welcome. I'm probably going to sit here and mentally pet your comment for a while after I post this response.

Augh. I was so conflicted about posting this in the first place. I'm not sure that Kakashi's character really stretches to taking kittens home to Konoha. But I tried anyway, and I'm glad it came off successfully for you. Your comment is a great relief, to know that the parts I wanted to work, DID, mainly.

I really appreciate your comment. Thank you!

[rabid_fangrrl]

I'm not sure that Kakashi's character really stretches to taking kittens home to Konoha.
Pffffft! Of course it does! His crunchy exterior was cracked long ago by Obito, his Sensei and Rin! Who hasn't read Kakashi Gaiden? Pfffffffft! actually I just recently read through it all on onemanga shhhhhh tell no one
It was further crunchified by those little bastards on Team 7 who pulverized any remaining walls and filled in any moats around Kakashi's little <3.
The story you've written elucidates quite clearly the fact that as he is not the person he was. That armor, that life - does not fit him anymore.
So there.
::snuggles you::

[photoash]

Very interesting story... especially the brutal and efficient ending O_O I like that you didn't put a pretty face on things (how fallen leaves of you ;)!) but just woah didn't see that ending coming!

Great job :)