Ths is lovely and gorgeous. And you did brilliantly with your first smut, especially since you were writing smut that was doomed from the beginning. But the thing is, you've written it so well that it makes the story work.
Like Rose's wish for him to enjoy, and her desire to be desired, it's wonderful.
Thank you so much, you are INCREDIBLY sweet. And supportive. I appreciate it SO MUCH I can't even tell you, and I'm so glad you liked it (and that it worked for you!!) =)
It's true that shower sex isn't as easy as we writers tend portray it, and you've shown that wonderfully here. But even with 'bad-sex' it's still about the love with these two. :) And if this is your first shot at writing smut, then it's extremely well done. :)
Thank you so much!! And yes it's absolutely about the love with them! =D (And yes this was my first NSFW fic - both poor fogsblue and who-in-whoville can attest to how nervous I was about writing it!!) =D
There might have been a small squeal when I saw you were writing fic again, it seems like it's been ages, lol
Anyway, I loved this mostly for the feelings you managed to put into it, because despite the bad sex, and yeah, shower sex in reality is damn near impossible, the main thing I'm tasking away is how afraid they both were and how much they loved each other
Thank you!! And asdsjgjlkgjhflk you're the best!! I didn't think anyone even remembered I wrote anything >.< ^^ But yes thank you!! The sex was one of the prompts, but I wanted the sex to be about THEM, if that makes sense - so I'm very glad that came across!
Haha that IS next on my list after my other WIP! I was feeling a little bit bad because it kind of got lost on Tumblr, so who-in-whoville recommended I repost it, which I will do, one chapter at a time. So it will be a little bit longer, but it will get done!! =D
The way you've written their emotions and actions, and especially the underlying motivations and fears (finally voiced) is so true to them (even Rose's 'stars' attempt at humour), that it feels like voyeurism - but in a really good way... (Maybe I should have said cinema verite?) It all feels real.
Thank you so much!! It's so funny you say that, I like to try to literally envision a story in my mind (like a movie) when I write it so that I can "watch" the characters, then write down how I see them behaving, if that makes sense. I guess that came across here - so yay!!! =D
I know EXACTLY what you mean, and it makes as much sense to me as it does to you! It's nice to know I'm not the only one who has a sound stage inside her head. Do they ever keep you awake, adding to and changing what you'd written for them?
Oh definitely haha!! Especially if it's a scene that doesn't feel complete to me, I'll "watch" it a few more times just to see what pops up, and let the scene direct itself!
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Ths is lovely and gorgeous. And you did brilliantly with your first smut, especially since you were writing smut that was doomed from the beginning. But the thing is, you've written it so well that it makes the story work.
Like Rose's wish for him to enjoy, and her desire to be desired, it's wonderful.
Yesss, you should write more! ;)
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But even with 'bad-sex' it's still about the love with these two. :)
And if this is your first shot at writing smut, then it's extremely well done. :)
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Anyway, I loved this mostly for the feelings you managed to put into it, because despite the bad sex, and yeah, shower sex in reality is damn near impossible, the main thing I'm tasking away is how afraid they both were and how much they loved each other
great fic love :)
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now if you could just find the inspiration to go back and finish The Awakening.....lol
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