QR / Chapter 20 - Suspension Bridge

[streetscribbles]

Title: Quiet Revolution / Chapter 20 - Suspension Bridge
Author: street scribbles
Rating: R
Summary: A conversation with Neville Longbottom steers Hermione and Draco in the, hopefully, right direction.
A/N: I was motivated! And this chapter might have been easy to write. ;) Thank you to everyone who commented on the last chapter - it meant a LOT

Comments

[bluebear_74]

Yay update! I'm glad things worked out well with neville. I hope the spell works. Update soon so we can all find out!

[streetscribbles]

Thanks for reading! And as for the updating, I'll try. ;P

[freyza]

Oooooh. Interesting! I wish I could leave a longer review, raving about how awesome this update is! Alas, homework sucks. But a few things:

- The confrontation with Neville and Draco is so fitting. I thought it was believable and had a nice balance of tension and humor (especially with Hermione being pushy).
- The inner thoughts of Draco as he's faced with some uncomfortable truths. Well done!

I will say that the first few paragraphs sounded a little bit awkward to me. It's hard for me to pinpoint why exactly they did, but it seemed a little heavy on the parenthetical statements. When I have a little more time, I might be able to clarify what exactly seemed off.

ANYWAY. This was a really nice transition chapter! And I'm glad you're still finding time to do something you enjoy (writing QR) inbetween LSAT studying. =)

[streetscribbles]

I will say that the first few paragraphs sounded a little bit awkward to me.
Well, everything I write seems awkward to me, so I can't help you out, haha. It might be because everything I normally write is SUPER dialogged. And when I go into descriptions, I like to do them in a sort of story-telling form of narration, so I guess with this chapter, it was more just flatly laid out history/happenings, so I'll admit it was boring. That might've been it? ;P

Thanks though!

[streetscribbles]

Umm, did I just type dialogged? I don't know if that's an actual word, but you get what I'm saying, haha.

[sweetwaterpink]

Thanks for the new chapter. BTW, I love Britney's new single and the fan remix version.

[streetscribbles]

Thanks for reading!

Me too! I can't wait for her comeback.

[bisai_kihaku]

Another superb update!

I really like how the flower is so important. It's the kind of thing J.K.R. would probably do herself. Mention something in passing and then it's the key to everything...

Lovely Neville and Draco confrontation! Neville spitting at him is so... perfect.

Can't wait for another chapter!!

[streetscribbles]

THANK YOU! I'm glad you're enjoying the symbolism/recurring flower, and I might've copied it from JKR, but, anyway! I appreciate you reading + commenting! Have a good weekend. :D

[dedra]

Oh God, what a great chapter! It really shows the growth in Draco for him to apologize to Neville and treat him with some respect...and Neville, his uncanny memory for Herbology...somehow I knew that flower was important, especially since Hermione dug it out of the trash...

♥LOVES♥

[streetscribbles]

THANK YOUUU! I really felt like this chapter was a little off, for some reason. I dunno, uneasy and whatnot about posting it, so you pointing out that you liked some of the key features really settles my nerves! :) Thanks again for always having such great things to say in your reviews. :D