Severance

[stupeur]

Title: Severance (one-shot)
Author: stupeur
Editor: mtembo
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Nine-year-old Miya and his mom confront each other about a decision of hers.
Notes: Obviously no romantic pairing here, sorry :P I got the idea from an interview in which Miya talks about his childhood, and also was considerably inspired by the song Danzetsu, after which this

Comments

[wasuretakute]

Aw, this makes me sad... especially since I know how Miya-kun would have felt, since my mother passed away a couple of years ago. Nice story, though! I like the way you write. ^.^

[stupeur]

Oh, I'm sorry about your mother :/ It was my first time writing something like this, and I didn't know what kind of reactions to expect. I'm really sorry if I hit a nerve m(_ _)m

But that said, thank you for your kind comments! Please don't be sad <3

[wasuretakute]

You're welcome! And no, you didn't hit a nerve! Sorry if my comment sounded that way. :p But thank you for your kind words. ^.^

[wawachan]

It's great. I like it. Some people can't even put so much feeling and pensiveness in a couple of sites or a book.
And somehow i kinda thought, it reminded me of myself here and there.

[stupeur]

Thank you so much hon <3 I'm really happy that you like it. In a way, I'm also happy that you were able to relate to it somehow... although I certainly hope that it didn't make you feel sad or anything :(

[stupeur]

Wow, thank you so much for the feedback :D I really appreciate and I'm really glad you liked it!

Don't worry, my next one is already on the way! Although it will be completely different... *rubs hands evilly*

[hanako]

hey hon i finally read it! sorry for the lateness. m(_ _)m

as expected from you, beautifully written! *claps claps* what i like about this fic is that it's extremely realistic. not overdone, not romanticized, it's just something that could happen and just allows us to remember that after all miya is human. ;)

i just wished it was longer!! i like how it ends, but i'd wish for more! :D

funny fact: right before starting the fic, i went and grabbed some single slices of cheese (as you know i get hungry at night) and as i read the line: he started folding a slice, tearing it into small squares, I DID THE EXACT SAME THING!!

i also put the first piece in my mouth when masaaki did. :O

[stupeur]

Awwwwe thank you doll :3 Don't worry about the "lateness", it's my own fault for taking forever to put it up lol. Anyway, I'm really happy you enjoyed it! Unfortunately if I was to write a sequel I fear it wouldn't be as good :P I have no idea what would happen from there anyway ^^;

And ZOMG Miya and you are totally connected through TEH CHEESE. Forget Mr. Lee, Miya is your one true cheesesoulmate.

(Now I'm craving cheese too...)

[yutasexy]

It was well-written and I love your description of a young Miya. It's also sad that his mother is weak, but I've never lost my husband nor have I married for convenience so what do I know?

It was a good story :)

[stupeur]

Hmm, that's interesting... in fact, I didn't see his mother as "weak" before reading your comment. I mean, after all she's doing it because she truly believes it's the best for all of them, so does that make her weak or strong? (I honestly don't know.)

When I read the interview, I was surprised that she got married again two years later... it just seems kind of fast to me (but I wouldn't know either). Then again, culturally speaking it seems to me like the Japanese are more prone to marry for convenience's sake or just the sake of getting married (I apologize for the huge generalization here).

Anyway, thank you very much ^_^

[yutasexy]

Hmm, I guess I meant "weak" more emotionally... I understand there is sadness for the loss of her husband, but the way she reacted to Miya's words and how she was so... easily defeated by them? Or at least that's how I felt. You know, what I mean? I guess "weak" might have been the wrong word to use, gomen. This might sound silly, but I usually feel like I take the emotions of the characters or people as I interpret their emotions (I guess that's why I'm an extremely emotional person :P) and when I read Hisako's part, I felt weak ;_;. Of course, it's not a negative thing, it's just how I interpreted it :).

[stupeur]

Oh, don't worry, I'm not taking your comment the wrong way or anything! I can't expect everyone to like or agree with my characters, so that's perfectly fine. I just thought it was interesting that you said you find her "weak", because I just hadn't look at things this way at all, so it sort of brought another perspective... But come to think of it, my characterization of her was as a widow who is struggling to keep a strong exterior for her children's sake, while she has to go through just as much sadness and pain as them... And yes, she finds herself unable to keep it up, so I guess that it makes sense that you thought of weakness and defeat :O