Apple of my Eye, part 1

[stupeur]

Title: Apple of my Eye (1/6)
Author: stupeur
Editor: mtembo
Rating: R
Pairing: Tatsurou (MUCC) x Shiina Ringo
Summary: Despite his fame as a visual artist in 1960s Tokyo, Tatsurou has a strong dislike of circles and events, but caves in to his friend Miya and follows him to a private party in a jazz lounge. There he meets the beautiful and elusive Ringo, a

Comments

[wawachan]

It's so well written. I love the way you play with words and how you get the text to be so fluently. Just reading a few sentences built something in my imagination and created an atmosphere.
I like it <3

Good work <3

[stupeur]

Thank you so much! I'm really happy with how it turned out. It makes me happy to know that I was able to create an atmosphere for this story and that people seem to be able to get into it :D So thanks again for your comment <3

[stupeur]

Hahaha I'm sorry... I hope you manage to get some sleep in the end XD

Ah, I'm so happy! The part with Miya & Ringo at the end sounded really cool in my head, but I was scared that I wouldn't be able to write it out well... so your comment made my day :3

I finally have some free time tomorrow so I'll get started on the next chapter after getting some sleep :D

[stupeur]

Of course! Comments are love :D

I finally have time to work on it today *_* My friend is visiting from Canada so I have been seeing her a lot since she came here.

And btw, I forgot to say that like your Miya icon XD

[hanako]

Oh man you really got me hooked there. :T I loooved it. Beautifully written, girl you never disappoint! As I read this I totally have this really classy, wonderful image of them in suits and tight black dress and fur, I could imagine that scene where Ringo sings and Miya plays the piano really well. All thanks to your descriptions and the atmosphere that you created! Bravo, un million de fois!

[stupeur]

Ah ha! For some reason I knew you'd appreciate the glamour and "fashion" aspect of it (I'm going to spoil myself rotten with the descriptions). I was quite worried about not being able to write the piano part properly since it was my favorite, but it seems that people enjoyed it :D Thank you for your comment <3 I hope you'll like the other chapters *_*

[tamaofdeath]

I ADORE the details, and the atmosphere, it totally works to illustrate exactly what you had in mind. The little things, like Tatsurou caught mid-sip when Ringo walks in, absolutely kill.

You should spam the Mucc comm with your good fic. Like, kill it dead with awesome. 8D

Far from being a social chameleon like Miya, Tatsurou could only ever be Tatsurou, and he hated how obviously disappointing this always was.

I love this sentence. <33

[stupeur]

Thank you <33 Your comment makes me convulse internally with ze happies.

I actually cross-posted it to my LJ and the mucc68 comm, but I guess that the members just... didn't read it or didn't feel like commenting 8D; But yeah, spamming is what they're in for.

Ooh, I like this sentence too! I had quite a lot of trouble of working it into the story because it didn't fit anymore at some point... but I didn't want to lose it XD

[stupeur]

And that would be mucc69.

[princeleer]

This is amazing. I want more of it. ♥

[stupeur]

Thank you so much <3 You shall have more, as I just submitted the second part to my beta reader :D

[princeleer]

oooo yay! 8D