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suburban_boho

From The Ashes Chapter 5/15

Sep 20, 2015 15:48

Title: From The Ashes
Pairing: Ultimately: Maureen/Cynthia.
Summary: After an unspeakable tragedy leaves her a young widow, Maureen works to re-build her life out of the shadow of her late husband, with the help of friends, family, and especially Cynthia.
Warnings: Major character death, self-harm and suicide, addiction, depictions of blood (later ( Read more... )

maureen/ringo, chapter 5, from the ashes, maureen/cynthia, fic

Comments 8

jonesingjay September 21 2015, 22:03:50 UTC

Her smile widens a bit. “I have to admit, it felt good to do.”It felt good to read Cynthia having her moment! That John Lennon. What a huge ass! Well, it's not about him, but I've just got to say that I could imagine, a drunken John making a spec tale of such a thing. Since he actually turned up, I don't think he could've gone through with it all sober. He really did need that dressing down, and it means even more to me as a reader that it came from Cynthia. Showing John that she can no longer be cowed by him ( ... )

suburban_boho September 22 2015, 01:29:20 UTC

John in the late 60s can get away with being a complete ass as is. Add to that grieving (whether he admits it or not) and not being sober and yeah, that tendency is multiplied. And that dressing down really only could come from Cynthia. His hold on her is broken and she's becoming much more independent.It's empowering for her to do ( ... )

jonesingjay September 22 2015, 05:24:52 UTC

Yeah, your chapters have never been usually been long. Just enough for what you want to show. Which is your distinct style. It always leaves me wanting more, which works because it definitely keeps me coming back to read each installment.

I'm a bit pissed that Ringo's financial affairs didn't really set Maureen up for life. Which makes sense. They spent like there was no tomorrow, made bad financial decisions, and had bad financial decisions made on their behalf. Living the lifestyle of the rich and famous, but not wealthy on paper.

Looking forward to the roommate situation that'll unfold. And, of course, about who will eventually make the first 'move'. This sort of reminds me of the RP we did of Maureen and Pattie.

suburban_boho September 22 2015, 19:10:15 UTC

It's not that Maureen isn't necessarily set for life it's that she doesn't know. Ringo left his step-father in charge of his financial stuff and Harry's just guessing right then. Maureen's concern is that her boys are taken care of. Harry's assured her of that and that's all she needs. She wants to go back into her old work and forming a life outside of being the perpetual widow. So she's very much fine with knowing the boys are taken care of. She's working class at the core.

Maureen and Cynthia have a lot of good times and a lot of not-so-good times ahead and I can't wait to explore some of those.

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mollybeakers September 22 2015, 06:52:04 UTC

Dick!John is perfect, and Dickstomper!Cynthia is even better. Cynthia is still very attuned to Mr. Dumbarse's moody bullshit, and handles him with some impressively stern ease. LOVED IT.

You deserve some pointed kudos for your story telling decisions here... as the tangential possibilities are many and each direction loaded with endless additional possibilities. It takes some focus to sift through all of that and stick with your chosen direction. I could not do this, and would be meandering around in funeralville STILL.

All to say that this solid foundation will serve you well as the story unfolds. You now have a cleared path to build the story of these two unique women. I wait with bated breath!!

suburban_boho September 22 2015, 18:35:03 UTC

Dickstomper!Cynthia is like my favorite description ever, LOL! Because in a way that's exactly what she did. She completely stomped on his dick ways. It was nice to give Cyn a chance to shine in front of/over John and in general.

Glad you like the direction I am taking this story and the way the chapters are unfolding. There certainly were lots of things that could have been covered and I have notes dating back months about funeral arrangements and things but ultimately the key points to show were John being a class-A dick with Cynthia completely shutting him down, and Maureen's decision to move back to Liverpool and setting up for Cynthia and Maureen to move in together.

Every successful endeavor needs a good foundation and I'm glad to see you think this has one.

Thanks for commenting and reading :)