LJ Idol Week 38: Open Topic

[suesniffsglue]

PhoenixFive years and twenty-three days ago marked the last sunset. The sun was a rose on fire settling on pastel sheets streaked with gold. It was glorious. Alia had perched on the roof of her new home, watching the sun settle below the tree line until all that was left in the sky were the stars. She had lingered as long as she could; though her

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[jexia]

You made it! Hooray!

[jexia]

"she carved a space in the bone of her wrist to hide them all wrapped up, an iridescent fiery pearl barely visible beneath ivory" is so beautiful.

Love love loved the imagery in this. Great job.

Minor things: "between to families"

"her smile a parenthesis for impending her panic"

[suesniffsglue]

I knew there'd be something!! Thank you :)

[bleodswean]

This is so strange and dark and mysterious and truly powerful! You hooked me from the beginning....and even at the ending still haven't let go.

[suesniffsglue]

Thank you so much! I'm thrilled to hear that :) Strange and dark is my writing comfort zone. I've been trying to switch it up and do different things, but I had so little time to write this I had to just go with what I know. I'm nervous about it, so I'm glad it worked for you!

[bleodswean]

This is so strange and dark and mysterious and truly powerful! You hooked me from the beginning....and even at the ending still haven't let go.

[suesniffsglue]

Thank you so much!

[crisp_sobriety]

The imagery in this piece is stunning. I think you've really outdone yourself here --wow!

[suesniffsglue]

Thank you so, so much. That means a lot to me!