LJ Idol Week 2: That One Friend

[suesniffsglue]

That One FriendGrace stands on her tiptoes to peer out the kitchen window as she scrubs dinner's remnants from the crockpot. The kids are playing quietly in the backyard, and no one seems to be in danger of tears

Comments

[rayaso]

Creepy creepy creepy, and so good! Your husband comes home late at night, and all he has to say is pretreat the blood on his clothes? Wonderful!

[suesniffsglue]

Thank you! I was hoping to embrace the creep factor. I didn't know how I was going to end it until I did, and I just thought that would be such a creepy feeling.

[murielle]

I am totally creeped out! I have to know what he and Ted are up to. I just have to know!

Great job of showing/building the tension.

I must know more!

[suesniffsglue]

Thanks so much! I'm glad it was gripping :) This might have to be continued!

[magazhchi]

Ewww! This was creepy. I mean it as a compliment *smiles* Enjoyed this. Is there more?

[suesniffsglue]

Creepy is my favorite. Thank you :) There is no more as of yet, but since this got a decent response, perhaps I will have to continue!

[garnigal]

This is amazing. I want to know so much more... and I don't think it can possibly end well.

[suesniffsglue]

Thank you! I don't think it can end well either. I was planning on leaving this a stand-alone piece, but maybe I will have to continue!

[halfshellvenus]

Y.I.K.E.S!

It was worrying enough when it was clear Jim was dodging his responsibilities (single-parenting 3 kids every night when you have a spouse who is off work?) and maybe having an affair with Ted.

But the blood and rot and Ted's "philosophies" and projects... holy cow. Something truly frightening is happening, and Jim became a member of a cult he didn't even notice existed.