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Fic: O Holy Night

Jan 03, 2007 15:30

O Holy Night (4/4)
By Sunrize83

Rating: GEN, PG-13
Characters: Sam, Dean
Description: Sam knew the truth, and the burden of it was becoming more than he could bear. Dean wasn't the one who should have died.
Author's note: Many thanks to iamstealthyone for beta. This fic was written for spn_christmas combining two prompts: An "It's a Wonderful Life" takeoff where Sam sees ( Read more... )

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Comments 58

pheebs1 January 3 2007, 21:50:53 UTC

This was such a good end to this fic.

When Sam started to speak, Dean cut him off. "Just...shut up a minute, okay?" He took a deep breath. "I know I've been a bastard. I know you miss Dad, and you're hurting, and I'm sorry I...I just can't give you what you need." He looked at Sam, his eyes glistening. "But you are not to blame for any of this. Do you understand that?" AW DEAN. And saying he'll work on it. BLESS HIM.

Thanks so much for writing and sharing this.

sunrize83 January 4 2007, 23:18:36 UTC

Ah, I'm so glad the ending didn't disappoint. I struggled so much with where to place this fic. I'd have loved to have known the big secret before writing, but quickly figured out that wasn't going to be an option. Having the boys deal a bit with CB seemed the next best option. I'm really pleased it all worked for you. Thanks so much for the feedback!

iamstealthyone January 3 2007, 21:57:12 UTC

Great ending chapter, dear! Dean warming Sam up, and the boys having a little talk about the Crossroads deal, and Sam feeling better about things, and the nice, warm final lines ... Very nice. :)

Favorite lines:

You're pissing me off, Sammy. Open your eyes.

Love this, because it’s so Dean. Worried and gruff at the same time.

Sam tried to respond, but his body felt too heavy and thick--like that time he and Dean had been hunting a water sprite and got stuck in a bog.

Good analogy.

Dean navigated them around the wooden table, swearing again when Sam's feet tangled up and they bounced off a wall.

This image amuses me. *g*

A tremor rippled through Sam's body, followed quickly by another, then another. Suddenly he was shivering in earnest. "C...cold," he stuttered, teeth clacking.

Poor, cold Sam!

"Dude, you're like ice."

"Ss...sorry."

Leave it to Sam to apologize, silly boy. *pets him*

Now she was real, she was his,

I so, so love the “she was his” bit. It’s just so vivid and powerful.

"Dad's gone. We're all we've ( ... )

sunrize83 January 4 2007, 23:20:25 UTC

Thank you, thank you. You know better than anyone what a journey this was for me. :) I ended up being pleased with the way it all turned out, and it's good to hear you liked it too. Thanks again for helping to fix that one particular trouble spot--it really made the rest fall into place. You're the bestest beta ever. *hugs*

iamstealthyone January 5 2007, 15:17:11 UTC

You know better than anyone what a journey this was for me. :)

And the journey had a good result: Another great fic from you. :)

Thanks again for helping to fix that one particular trouble spot--it really made the rest fall into place.

You're very welcome. Glad to help, as always.

You're the bestest beta ever. *hugs*

Aww. *hugs back* Thanks! You're too kind.

Your stories are a pleasure to beta. And comment on. :)

faithinfaith January 3 2007, 22:14:57 UTC

I have really enjoyed and loved every chapter, pretty much every word in this story, but this last Chapter really was the iceing of the cake! :)

This is a beautiful, well written story and I love the way you handle the language. The way you make it beautiful! Both Sam and Dean are in character and the emotions feel true and sincere. It's a believable, wonderful, heartbreaking but, at the same time, heartwarming story!

Thanks a lot for sharing your talent with us!

sunrize83 January 4 2007, 23:22:45 UTC

This is such lovely feedback--thank you!

I'm so pleased to hear you think I kept the boys in character, and that I was able to express things well. This was a tough one to tackle, and your kind words really have put a big smile on my face.

yourlivewire January 3 2007, 22:30:26 UTC

god, i love your stories. you really get into sam's head, and you write dean incredibly well, too. he's such a good big brother when sam is hurting. i can't wait to read whatever you write next. :)

sunrize83 January 4 2007, 23:52:30 UTC

*hugs* Thank you! Smiling here. I love Sammy, but he's so much more fun when Dean's around too. He really is the best big brother. I'll be cooking up a new story soon, I'm sure.

swanseajill January 3 2007, 22:33:58 UTC

Oh, oh, oh, squeeeee. What a totally wonderful ending. Everything about it was just perfect. I can't think of anything more coherent to say. Totally adored the way Dean looks after Sam with a snarky running commentary ( ... )

sunrize83 January 4 2007, 23:56:03 UTC

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked how this turned out.

You certainly know how I struggled with this one. It wasn't easy to know how to illustrate the differences Sam has made, and I was really torn about where to place this story in the timeline. Putting it after CB let me deal with some of that Sam grief that we've been shortchanged in the episodes. And writing this last, comfort chapter was the most fun.

As for more, well, I'm already plotting. But I've also got a few beta committments I think I'd better fulfill. :)