I don't see a thing wrong with it and the delicate balance during the fortune cookie conversation is perfect. The way you always do this is awesome. My little heart was just going all pitter pat.
I liked the fact Alex tried to be logical and voice what we all know would be the truth of the situation IRL. But also like the whole play between the fortunes.
And can I just say - I do believe this is the first fortune cookie fic that didn't use the old 'in bed' trope - congrats on that!
GGF was absolutely correct - post worthy and points for such an obscure holiday
As I told Forkie above, I was afraid it went from serious to not-so-serious too fast. But I really wanted to post it on May 4th and didn't have time for any more edits.
I thought about adding something about 'in bed' to the cookie convo, but that's been done so much and I just didn't think it was called for here.
I also like finding the oddball 'holidays' that no one is expecting. :-)
The transition didn't seem too abrupt to me. In my head, a conversation like they were having almost needs a more delineated break. IDK - it worked for me...
now, branching into the whole 'in bed' thing here - that would have thrown me out of the story, I think. I think the story could handle Yoda or 'in bed' but not both and IMHO Yoda worked better from Olivia - 'in bed' would have seemed too juvenile
Hey, I had fun so keep it up. Also a much better version of May 4th than the one I grew up with, the one about the Kent State Massacre. Just happens one of my older brothers knew 2 of the kids (who would now be approaching retirement) who were killed.
Glad you liked it. I had several 'holidays' to choose from this weekend - Star Wars, Derby Day, Cinco de Mayo (done that one already), and I'm sure there were others. I chose the one that seemed the least obvious. I'm glad to give you something light to read on the anniversary of such a tragedy.
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I don't see a thing wrong with it and the delicate balance during the fortune cookie conversation is perfect. The way you always do this is awesome.
My little heart was just going all pitter pat.
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I was afraid that there wasn't enough transition between the serious talk and the cookie conversation.
Yay for pitter pat. You made my face all smiley. :-)
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And can I just say - I do believe this is the first fortune cookie fic that didn't use the old 'in bed' trope - congrats on that!
GGF was absolutely correct - post worthy and points for such an obscure holiday
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As I told Forkie above, I was afraid it went from serious to not-so-serious too fast. But I really wanted to post it on May 4th and didn't have time for any more edits.
I thought about adding something about 'in bed' to the cookie convo, but that's been done so much and I just didn't think it was called for here.
I also like finding the oddball 'holidays' that no one is expecting. :-)
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now, branching into the whole 'in bed' thing here - that would have thrown me out of the story, I think. I think the story could handle Yoda or 'in bed' but not both and IMHO Yoda worked better from Olivia - 'in bed' would have seemed too juvenile
Keep finding the odd one!!
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world nutella day is Feb 5th (https://www.facebook.com/WorldNutellaDay)
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