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sunstar77

Fic: Timelines and All That - NEW ENDING, NC-17

Mar 31, 2008 20:06

Title: Timelines and All That
Pairing: Jack/Rose
Rating: NC-17
Summary: "I went back to her estate, in the 90s. Just once or twice. Watched her grow up. Never said hello, timelines and all that." What if Jack lied to the Doctor when he said that? What if he did say hello, just once?
Author's Notes: Betaed by the fabulous lon_dubhDisclaimer: I don't own ( Read more... )

jack, fic: doctor who, rose, fic: crossover, fic: torchwood

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sunstar77 April 1 2008, 23:22:37 UTC

Thank you

davidsgirl8414 April 1 2008, 15:18:19 UTC

That was the best go Jack and rose loved it.

sunstar77 April 1 2008, 23:22:43 UTC

Thanks

gwynevere1 April 1 2008, 20:51:37 UTC

I'm so glad you decided to redo this. A lot of fanfic writers would have thrown a hissy fit at the constructive criticism left for the previous version, instead of taking it into account.

This is now my favorite Doctor Who one-shot fic.

ETA: Don't forget to change the link in your fic list index at the top of your LJ!

sunstar77 April 1 2008, 23:25:53 UTC

Once upon a time I might have been one of those writers, but I'm old enough (and have been through enough college writing classes) to be able to take con crit well. Most of the time. :-) Thank you for your kind words, and the lovely rec on your LJ.

Thanks for the reminder about changing the link too.

wendymr April 1 2008, 22:35:41 UTC

Oh, wow. Now this is lovely - bittersweet and sad, but much more responsible on Jack's part and so nicely done :) Jack staying with her, seeing her safely home yet still fulfilling the need to have her forget works so much better.

And I agree with gwynevere1 - I admire you so much for taking the comments and concrit and turning this into a better story. It was already very good, as I mentioned then, but the placement of the retconning left me uncomfortable. Here, while I still wish Jack didn't have to do it, I know that he has to and I'm happy that he's seen her safely home. And Rose remembers a handsome man and might even have fuzzy memories of being taken home. She won't be ashamed of herself, or worse.

Lovely work :)

sunstar77 April 1 2008, 23:28:10 UTC

Thank you for your lovely praise. It means quite a lot to me, considering you're one of my favorite fic authors. :-) Way back when you commented on the original, I kept trying to figure out how to rewrite the ending. I'm glad I was finally able to come up with something that worked.

honorh April 8 2008, 22:30:28 UTC

Definitely like this one better than the last. Waking to an enigmatic note knowing you had sex you don't remember? Creepy! This? Very sweet and sad. Thanks for re-working the ending and, above all, for being so open to concrit.

sunstar77 April 11 2008, 23:02:06 UTC

Waking to an enigmatic note knowing you had sex you don't remember? Creepy!

I totally agree! This fic was a case of I just wasn't sure how to end it. I'm just glad that the people who left comments were so supportive and helpful. I'm not sure I would have come up with a better ending otherwise. :-)

Thanks for reading and commenting.