Comments | superdooper: Oh look I wrote a thing.

superdooper

Oh look I wrote a thing.

Nov 16, 2009 02:03

Bibliophile

( I remember the day she confessed it to me, her lips curling up in an almost seductive smile... )

Comments 2

echthroi November 16 2009, 17:24:01 UTC

This is awesome! I sometimes refer to reading books as eating them, but I never thought of it being literally done. The story is very sad, but sweet too. I don't know what work would make it better.

happilyfreckled December 10 2009, 22:36:20 UTC

Ooo... I liked it. Very bitter sweat. It's about the end of a relationship because of one person's obsession with something?

I wanted to see more of the characters' interaction. What justifies his feelings for her? Also I felt very distant from Nessa, even before she went crazy. Add some hints as to why she felt the need to eat books, perhaps? Maybe linger more on the parts where he feels like he is losing her. What/when/why/how is this happening? How does he feel? ...I WANT MORE!!! lol

I dunno.