To Please The Monster Inside [Carlisle/Jasper][Chapter Twelve]

[surgical_rush]

Title: To Please the Monster Inside [Chapter Twelve]
Pairing: Carlisle/Jasper
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Fiction
Summary: The monster inside Jasper lusts for human blood. When the desire is too strong to resist, there is only one who can help. Carlisle tamed this monster once, and now he must try again.

Comments

[comesaregular]

God, you update soon! I love it!:) I love how Jasper isn't himself at all when overcome with bloodlust. And I love that Edward saves him and accepts his feelings for Carlisle in the process. Great chapter.

[post_script3]

the vivid imagery totally blew me away...
["I feel wrong." Jasper mumbled, his voice sounded foreign.] this part was just heart breaking.
It feels as if he's finally woken up and realized how far he's fallen. Or he's come off from the high of drinking Carlisle' blood and reality is starting to sink in. I like how he seem to be slightly broken, like the cracks are just starting to surface.

I love how the dialogue and the narrative fits together perfectly, there's no diconnection, it's just fluid.

[surgical_rush]

Thank you, thank you.

This chapter was actually kind of weird to write. I had to imagine how dizzying and overpowering it would be, being surrounded by the one thing you desire so completely.