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To Please the Monster Inside [Carlisle/Jasper][Chapter Eighteen]

May 08, 2009 09:56

Title: To Please the Monster Inside [Chapter Eighteen]
Pairing: Carlisle/Jasper
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Fiction
Summary: The monster inside Jasper lusts for human blood. When the desire is too strong to resist, there is only one who can help. Carlisle tamed this monster once, and now he must try again.

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twilight slash, carlisle/jasper

Comments 11

post_script3 May 8 2009, 01:25:29 UTC

Oh my god. I think you just broke me. Totally did not see that coming. Having a hard time thinking so I will give you a longer analytical review later.

but wow. and ouch. Poor Jasper!

surgical_rush May 9 2009, 02:53:45 UTC

Thank you

:)

Most painful cliffhanger yet... gaysrstillokay May 8 2009, 02:14:45 UTC

This chapter was so incredibly powerful. Clammy palms, wide eyes, holding of the breath, speeding of the heart- your writing is astounding enough to provoke a physical response. I am loving this. At this point, you could be writing about any pairing in the world, and I would remain your devoted reader just because of your gift. The fact that it is Carlisle/Jasper... better than a pony, m'dear ( ... )

Re: Most painful cliffhanger yet... surgical_rush May 9 2009, 03:03:14 UTC

Better than a pony, you say?!

Well, thank you :)

It was fun for me to write this chapter, but I continually felt horrible for being so cruel to Carlisle. The idea of such a compassionate, beautiful creature being completely torn apart by Jasper's words was just too good to resist - and it made me feel kind of evil for enjoying myself.

Oh, yes, I am very excited about bringing this stranger into the story.

Response to your odd side-note: I actually don't even know what the font is called, it just happens when I copy and paste from Word into livejournal.

And as I always say, thank you so much for your comments which flatter me beyond all possibly flattery.

It means so much to me that you are able to appreciate my story in such a perfect way.

xox

To Please the Monster Inside desmonda_265 May 8 2009, 03:31:12 UTC

Thank you so much for adding to your story! Keep up the great work!

Re: To Please the Monster Inside surgical_rush May 9 2009, 03:03:41 UTC

And thank you for reading :)

x

you_ravish_me May 8 2009, 06:30:07 UTC

AHH! The angst!!!! My poor Jasper! The avid slash reader/writer in me says 'Take Carlisle and run! The women can deal!' You have pleased the angst lover in me. I can't wait for moar. MOAR I tell you!

Wonderful. Keep it up ^_^

Peace and love,

you_ravish_me

surgical_rush May 9 2009, 03:13:16 UTC

lol, thank you very much.

And yes, if Jasper were to kidnap Carlisle and escape to Mexico, who knows where the story could end up then?

xoxox

:D

PS: A note on Twilulz - Jasper and his penis pencil are killing me! The things he gets himself into because of that thing. Way too hilarious.

harrietmary May 8 2009, 21:28:13 UTC

Ouch.

I did not see that coming at all.
D:

I can't really think of much else to coment on the actual chapter , just wow.

I liked you use of names in this.How Carlisle called Jasper 'son' , as if to emphisize just how wrong thier relationship is and at the end when Jasper called him 'Doctor Cullen' as if all bond between them had been broken.

The change in Jaspers way of thinking is dramatic and I can tell how it will implement the story in the next few chapters.

I cannot wait for more.

x

surgical_rush May 9 2009, 03:16:13 UTC

Yes, Jasper is becoming...evil?

How exciting!

Thank you xox