16 | {naruto} To Break The Status Quo

[katakokk]

This is an erasure for erasureathon.

Title: To Break the Status Quo
Rating: G
Fandom (of original text): Naruto
Pairings/Characters: N/A
Word Count: 116
Summary: An erasure for erasureathon.

Disclaimer: I do not own Naruto, nor do I own hungrytiger11's The World, Made by Hand.

Comments

[hungrytiger11]

Wow. No other words for that.

It is so cool to see something with echos of what I wrote in an entirely new form, a new thing so pretty in and of itself.

So. Just- wow.

[katakokk]

I'm glad you like it! I was very nervous about it. :)

[caramelsilver]

This is so wonderful! I'm in awe. (And slightly jealous, yours is so much better than mine!)

Favorite lines:

There it is: a distorted echo in her brain.

The world is poetic, overdramatic, picture perfect.
Notice the flaws in the image.

The ending stanza is beautiful. Well done, Kathy!

[katakokk]

Aww, thank you! (And no way, yours was awesome. However, I seem to have forgotten to comment on it. *runs off*)

I'm glad you liked it. :D

[be_themoon]

Oh, this is pretty! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to get here. D: But seriously, it's very pretty! It's much more of a story than mine is, and I love that line "Notice the flaws in the image" because *chills* eee. And the weed being a distorted echo of her brain! Very nicely done, and the story that comes across to me is very dark and chilly and quite interesting.

(You know what would be fun? Some sort of thing where you did an erasure, and then someone was given your erasure, without knowledge of the original source, and told to make a story out of it. Uh. Off topic now.)

I liked it! Wonderful work. <333

[katakokk]

Thank you! I'm glad you like it! :D Well, thankfully, it's coherent. My first draft was...a bunch of disjointed phrases. *hides* Chills? Really? *is flattered*

(That would be REALLY AWESOME. Um, but what would you call it? A de-erasure?)

Thanks so much! ♥

[zempasuchil]

This paints such a fantastic picture - the first stanza alone is like a microcosm. The first two lines are possibly my favorites. With the picture-perfect world, yet the image has flaws - are these flaws perfection or is it the image of the perfect world that is flawed? These are both really cool options to think about. The hungers for worth and nothing blooms are really powerful and my gut aches; I can't stop re-reading that, it's really resonant.

I love the planting and flower imagery you really bring out here - flowering, a weed growing, and digging. And she transforms by the end! into something happy through a trial, from a perfect world with discontent to a hard world of work where she is too happy. (hmmmmm, too happy! that is thought-provoking). I like this a lot a lot :D

[katakokk]

Awww, I'm so glad you like it! :) As for the picture perfect world, it's more that some people have the perception that the world is perfect (when they're on top of the world, etc.), but really it's a messed up, screwed up place (because while recent Naruto manga chapters are crap, mostly, the manga-ka occasionally brings up really ethical stuff where there's a lot of gray areas).

Haha, the flower imagery owes itself to the fact that there is mention of flowers in the original text, or it never would have happened. :\ And, yeah, the too happy. :D I'm glad you picked up on that!

Thanks so much for reading and for setting up the whole comm! ♥

[zempasuchil]

I like that! I don't know anything about Naruto, at first I thought it was just a silly cartoon but my brother says it gets pretty cool. It sounds neat - I am so for anything that examines grey areas.

I did see the flower imagery in the original - I just really really like how you integrated it! It's not overwhelming but it's still there and effective and that is super awesome.

lol, thank YOU for participating! anyway, this was all just a plot to convert people to erasure poetry and get more erasures for my reading pleasure ;D

[katakokk]

Hahaha, my brother was the one who recced it to me as well. :) Most of the time it isn't especially serious, but the couple chapters that were really ethical were very nice.

Oh, thank you! I loved the way the flower represented what I was trying to get across in my poem perfectly, so I had to include it. :D

Haha, no problem, I had fun doing it! This should be annual.