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Jul 08, 2010 00:27

Title: Vulnerable
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 821
Characters: Lucci, Jyabura
Topic: Vulnerable

Vulnerable

The day Lucci woke up he was still weak. Jyabura could see how his body was shaking, his skin almost as white as the sheets he was lying on. Nevertheless, CP9's once most valuable member managed to sit, not straight but somehow cambered, looking ( Read more... )

fanfiction, vulnerable, lucci, jyabura, one piece

Comments 3

greensan July 8 2010, 09:27:59 UTC

I think your English are really good! Maybe you missed a few hits on 'enter', but it still is a really good piece of writing you got here!
CP9 gets to little attention!

sushi_pin July 13 2010, 05:17:41 UTC

thank you very much for you comment

yes, sadly, cp9 gets too little attention ._.
i still hope for luffy to go on big revenge, collecting some people from the grandline (among them cp9) to go against world government >.

greensan July 13 2010, 09:08:20 UTC

*too (I fail English IIIOTL)

And that was a really good idea! Go Lu, collect all people holding a grudge against the WG and then destroy it! Go to your pop and take the CP9 with you!!