Uncharted Waters 1/5 (PG-13)

[swanseajill]

Title:  Uncharted Waters
Author:  Swanseajill
Characters:  Dean, Sam, OFC
Pairing:  Mild Dean/OFC
Warning/Spoilers:  Set between Hunted and Playthings
Disclaimer:  Don’t own them, making no money from them.

Summary:  “It should have been me!  The parnock attacked me.  But Dean deliberately got in the way, and it took him down instead.  Stupid,

Comments

[iamstealthyone]

Good to see you post over here. :)

I like how you open the story with Ellen (and then Caitlin) getting news of Dean’s injury, and the tense feel that accompanies that. And great Ellen voice during her conversation with Sam.

I also like that Caitlin isn’t starry-eyed about hunting and hunters, and rightly so. It’s a dangerous world. It's one thing to respect what hunters do, and quite another to want to leap into that world. I like the balance you have with her character in that regard.

Favorite lines:

Maybe she’d go skinhead or Mohican.

*g*

She had yet to decide if she wanted to live in this world, or run from it.

Nicely phrased.

Well, despite what Jo may have told you, Dean Winchester’s no God, and he ain’t the Devil incarnate either,

*snickers* Oh, Jo. You definitely have some Dean issues, don’t you?

Within five minutes she was on the road, foot down hard on the gas, heading into the unknown.

Great ending line for this section.

[swanseajill]

Really, posting lovely comments here is way about and beyond the call of duty, as you must be heartily sick of this story! Thanks for commenting on favorite lines and I'm glad you liked the final sentence, even though I added it after your thorough beta!

[mrsericszmanda]

Wow, this sounds very promising.
I loved reading it.

Thanks very much for posting it.

*now waits for more*

[swanseajill]

Thanks for taking the time to post and for the encouraging words. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. There'll be more in a day or so.

[kriptkeeper]

Can't wait to read more! Great character!!

[swanseajill]

I'm so glad you like my OC - I was really nervous about her, because I desperately don't want her to be a typical Mary Sue. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

[starrylizard]

Nice beginning. I look forward to more. Your OC seems pretty cool! :)

[swanseajill]

Thanks for reading. I'm really glad you like my OC so far - she was by far the scariest part to write!

[mad_server]

Oooh! *is hooked*

[swanseajill]

Oh, good! I just hope the rest of it keeps your interest. There should be another part up tomorrow or Thursday. Thanks for taking the time to comment.