January 27th

[acacia_r]

I wrote this a super long time ago, probably three years. I wrote it for my Grandpa, who died three years ago today. I don't know that it's any good, but I felt like it would be appropriate to post it and see what you guys thought. If you don't like it, don't worry, I can take constructive critisism- I won't get mad even though this is kind of a

Comments

[ginni_tamez]

this is beautiful and wistful, the last line especially.
it's not one of your best, but that doesn't mean much, since your worst poem is better than the average person's best. I'd try taking off a few of the commas for variety and playing around with the tempo. good work. <3