February

[nihil_sine_vos]

Death is always a most unsettling sight to see

Comments

[amadareneko]

ooooh, chilling.

first line - a 'sight to see' is a bit redundant; obviously a 'sight' is for seeing.

last line - 'eradicate this fetus', while suitably eerie, feels wordy. I can't actually think of a better way to say it, though :|

[nihil_sine_vos]

You're right about the first line, I"ll change it later.

I wanted the last line to be almost clinical. Very detached.
I'm still not crazy about it, but I really like 'eradicate' because it means completely distroyed forever.

[amadareneko]

I agree about 'eradicate'; it was just the rhythm that got me. I dunno.