HELLO MY HONEY ch. 2 beta-ed

[sweetlov3]

(BETA-ED version by eun ahn jihae7)

'who are you?''
'ehh...he doesn't remember me?' donghae screamed in his mind.

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HYUKJAE POV
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this guy suddenly kissed and placed a silver bracelet on my wrist.
i looked at it and there were words that was imprinted on it, and it says 'LEE

Comments

[lorzakie]

wooohoo!Dongsaeng this is good..I can smell the smut part haha..XDD..

To make the smut part, you should analyze what characteristic should the character hold. How do you wished them to act?

Do you want an innocent hyukjae?or a slutty one?

In donghae's part, do you want him to be gentle? sneaky? pervert? dominant?or something?^^..Sorry for the term..>_<..

Since you write in different POVs, you had an opportunity to elaborate each character's thoughts. Try to do a smut scene while elaborating their thoughts..

I know how you feel.. I'm really embarrassed to write smut at first!XDD.. but I've decided to give it a shot..hehee...^^..You should try too!:)).. Try to make a smut and let's see what could I add..^^... Just PM it to me neh? I will try to help u with that..^^

[sweetlov3]

an innocent hyukkie but how???

[lorzakie]

Dongsaeng, i'm sorry for the late comment. I'm really busy these days..>_<... Try to make a scene where hyukkie will try to struggle against donghae's hold yet he would like it once they made love

[sweetlov3]

thank you unnie its ok i'm quite busy also with my HW argh! they're so many but i i'll find time to write thank you again unnie ^_^

[enhelik]

Wow, you are good.
Hyukkie an inoccent one.
It's will be interesting. ^^

[kuma_ri]

ohohoho..
beast hae is coming out..
kekeke