I was actually really worried that the length would put people off. And cursing a blue streak because I knew it was too long for one post, and trying to get it all reformated and squared away before the midnight deadline.
"And then Phelps's gonna have to swim everything in the medley relay all by himself," Aaron said. "No one wants that."
That line is... so awesome. I adore the way the guys think, especially about the splitting up and giving two others a fighting chance. It seems like the sort of thing my friends and I would do.
Although probably, Brendan thought, it was more likely that he or Aaron had accidentally clocked Ian one, and Ian was harboring elaborate plans of revenge. Reality was a stone cold bitch.
It didn't stop him from popping one of the most sudden and crippling hard-ons that he'd had since he was fourteen.
Eeeee.
Oh, Brendan. You so hopeless.
"Yeah, man, you gotta stop telling the Ben-Gay in the swimsuit story," Aaron said. "You need something new. That wasn't even the best one
( ... )
"Michael?" Aaron said thoughtfully. "Hmm. That's interesting. Maybe get him before a race, you know? In the locker room. Teasing him, so he'd be just a little off balance. I'd touch his hip or something like, light and quick, so he wouldn't know if I was being serious or not. And then I'd wait for afterwards, to see how well he did. I'd corner him and tell him I was going to fuck him by the end of the meet, but I'd phrase it like he wouldn't know if I was talking about the pool or not."
NNNNNNNNNNNGH. Wow. That's... really hot.
Aaron thought it over. "Maybe. If I could hold his hands down. Tie 'em down or something. He's the kind who would pull hair, I bet. Hey, that's a good idea. I bet that would rattle him even more. I'd tie his hands down-- together, like, over his head-- and just talk dirty to him, see if he could take it without getting all flustered. About how I was going to bite his birthmark or his tattoo or something. He'd be all worried about if I was going to leave marks where his suit didn't cover up, so I'd be trying
( ... )
I have a medical condition which forces me to at least mention Michael in every single piece I ever write that even remotely refers to swimslash.
I heart Aaron too. I tried to figure out if he'd really knocked boots with Michael, and I came to my personal conclusion on it, but I figured I should leave it open to interpretation. I imagine he's a nice guy and will probably order more Chinese for Brendan and Ian when they get out of the shower. If they do get out.
And like I keep nattering, I was so worried over the length of this and I'm really very glad to find out that it didn;t bother folks that it was long. Thank you so much for the comprehensive feedback!
Aw, yeah. Love this, the snark, the cuteness, the innate homosexual Zen. I can tell I'm gonna reread this a bunch of times in the future. It's the perfect laid-back summer fic.
Oddly enough, it nearly got named something close to "innate homosexual zen." I'm really glad the laid-back aspect came through, and thank you so much!
You are a genius. Truly. I actually didn't mean to get on and read anything at all tonight. But here this was and it was yours and well.
I love it. Plain and simple.
It's subtle and it's believable and it's honest and it's so very, very funny.
The characterizations are just dead on. Aaron is ornery and a leetle bit gay and Ian is nice and has a tendency to fall asleep in moving cars, and Brendan - well - Brendan is confused but okay, exasperated and increasingly twitterpated.
Sorry, I also meant to bring up something else about Ian. He's usually characterized as so angst-ridden about his beliefs - and there's nothing wrong with that (I've done it). It was just a pleasant change to see him written in a manner where that just . . . wasn't an issue.
I thought that over quite a lot, and sort of decided that yeah, so many folks had already done the angst-ridden about beliefs angle very well, and that there wasn't as much to say on it anymore. So, I reckoned it was Brendan's turn to angst about it a bit.
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Damn this was good! Long and relaxed and lving and just plain *good*!!!
Fantastic job, hon!
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I was actually really worried that the length would put people off. And cursing a blue streak because I knew it was too long for one post, and trying to get it all reformated and squared away before the midnight deadline.
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That line is... so awesome. I adore the way the guys think, especially about the splitting up and giving two others a fighting chance. It seems like the sort of thing my friends and I would do.
Although probably, Brendan thought, it was more likely that he or Aaron had accidentally clocked Ian one, and Ian was harboring elaborate plans of revenge. Reality was a stone cold bitch.
It didn't stop him from popping one of the most sudden and crippling hard-ons that he'd had since he was fourteen.
Eeeee.
Oh, Brendan. You so hopeless.
"Yeah, man, you gotta stop telling the Ben-Gay in the swimsuit story," Aaron said. "You need something new. That wasn't even the best one ( ... )
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NNNNNNNNNNNGH. Wow. That's... really hot.
Aaron thought it over. "Maybe. If I could hold his hands down. Tie 'em down or something. He's the kind who would pull hair, I bet. Hey, that's a good idea. I bet that would rattle him even more. I'd tie his hands down-- together, like, over his head-- and just talk dirty to him, see if he could take it without getting all flustered. About how I was going to bite his birthmark or his tattoo or something. He'd be all worried about if I was going to leave marks where his suit didn't cover up, so I'd be trying ( ... )
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I heart Aaron too. I tried to figure out if he'd really knocked boots with Michael, and I came to my personal conclusion on it, but I figured I should leave it open to interpretation. I imagine he's a nice guy and will probably order more Chinese for Brendan and Ian when they get out of the shower. If they do get out.
And like I keep nattering, I was so worried over the length of this and I'm really very glad to find out that it didn;t bother folks that it was long. Thank you so much for the comprehensive feedback!
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I love it. Plain and simple.
It's subtle and it's believable and it's honest and it's so very, very funny.
The characterizations are just dead on. Aaron is ornery and a leetle bit gay and Ian is nice and has a tendency to fall asleep in moving cars, and Brendan - well - Brendan is confused but okay, exasperated and increasingly twitterpated.
I'm duly impressed.
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