Week 7, Title: Missing her was dark grey all alone

[swirlsofblue]

Jake stands in line for lunch, his hands gripping the tray too tight, and his heart-beat pounding in his ears. He wants to look around, but can’t afford to seem skittish. Tries to hold steel in his spine and isn’t sure he succeeds. Jake’s not sure whether he should be more concerned about being a cop sharing a cell block with guys he’s put away or

Comments

[rayaso]

What a great set up and twist! I did not see that coming. This was very imaginative and entertaining. Great job!

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you, glad you didn't see it coming, I was hoping the twist would work :).

[eternal_ot]

Oh Wow! This blew me away...I guessed it almost at the last minute when the picture conversation came up..So this was pretty neat. Superb use of the prompt..nice premise..I loved and enjoyed it.Kudos!

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you, so glad you enjoyed it :)

[anonymous]

THAT caught me off-guard and was unexpected! But this is very well-written, and I enjoyed the way you told it. Excellent writing; I was captivated.

(This is bsgsix - don't know why my name isn't showing, and DW is giving me crap about it!)

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you, so glad it caught you off guard and that you enjoyed it :).

(It may be because it's on livejournal, I don't know how the cross-posting of comments over the two sites work.)

[bleodswean]

Queen of the Twist! This is fantastically well-told and very fun! You're so generous to your readers, J. What a great piece!

[swirlsofblue]

Thank you for the lovely comment, so glad you liked the twist :).

[morettaallstar]

Fucking fuck. I'm not sure if you know just how heart wrenching this is from the very beginning, but I had to stop and start. This is so good.

Mate.

I don't have words, but it is so good. Oh, Jake.

Have a hug.
I think I need a hug.
So well done.

[swirlsofblue]

Wow, this is such a lovely comment, thank you, so glad it moved you that way :).

*Hugs you*