Comments | switching_it_up: 'Square Root of Pride' for Shay

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'Square Root of Pride' for Shay_Nekochan

Sep 24, 2010 16:25

( 'Square Root of Pride' for Shay_Nekochan - Part 2 )

Comments 5

monarchist September 24 2010, 16:54:32 UTC

Wow. Just wow.

I love the entire build-up through this entire thing. Niou thinking Yagyuu is being daft and oblivious and yet, he has known the entire time and just waiting for Niou to get the nerve to say something. And the algebra throughout with differing answers of 8 & 2 just made me grin.

I absolutely loved this. Seriously. Fantastic job.

lucathia_rykatu September 24 2010, 21:58:27 UTC

I was laughing and feeling sorry for Niou during the crossdressing scene too, and really, those watermelons must have been super heavy. I'm beyond amused that Niou and Yagyuu ate that watermelon at the end.

I also loved the rallying between Yagyuu and Niou where Niou made Yagyuu forget all about tutoring, hehe.

kedi_kedi September 25 2010, 22:24:45 UTC

LOOOL!! Your Niou is infectious! I liked him so much, he had so many quirks about him that I just loved, like how uncouth and rough around the edges he was but still totally devoted to Yagyuu. Oh and the bit when he just waltzes out of the bathroom naked when his brothers there like DDDDDDDDDD: is something he'd totally do. Free spirit and all that XDDDD I was also playing the image over and over in my head and it was really good ;))))))))))

Yeah the trials and tribulations of trying to get through to Yagyuu was definitely portrayed well. The cross dressing was an A+ from me. Except, watermelons? How could he keep those in a bra without dropping one on his foot and yelping LOL! Poor boy.

Your Yagyuu was also a smooth bitch, I loved it >DD Especially him during the sexy time. Heeeee

I definitely liked this fic a lot ♥ Thank you anon! ♥

onlysayitonce October 15 2010, 01:03:27 UTC

Poor Niou! I actually found this a bit difficult to read, because Niou's emotions really came through and I felt so bad for him in his angst, and walking around with watermelons down his shirt. And such a waste of the one! :( But it made the ending even better. Very cute!

rei_sempai September 22 2013, 16:46:51 UTC

I vaguely remember reading this years ago. I'm glad I read it again today. I love how Niou actually cross dresses after deeming confessing and kissing Yagyuu to be an overload of gayness. Very well done, thank you!