Ahhh, really nice, I'm looking forward to more of the story! Perfect continuation, and the beginning scene was my favorite in this chapter. I like this part also (so accurate xD):
It was summer now and Tegoshi’s hair grew longer so he would sometimes put it into a small ponytail which made him took even more feminine than usual. When he smiled mischievously, he looked like some kind of forest sprite rather than a boy.
Finally got around to reading the whole thing. I really love this! Your choice of words, the plot, the characterizations. I love them. I especially love this part: It was a bit later, as they cuddled together simply enjoying each other’s warmth when Tegoshi spoke.
“B +”
“What?”
“You get a B+.” Shige’s face must have looked so incredulous that Tegoshi laughed.
“If I give you an ‘A’ you won’t have any motivation to work harder.” Tegoshi’s eyes looked mischievous and Shige leaned in to kiss that smirk off his face. “That’s the spirit.”
This chapter was really great too. I think you do a really good job of capturing their personalities. I liked the scene at the beach, with Koyama's easy enthusiasm, Tegoshi playing around, and Shige letting negativity creep in a bit at the end.
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It was summer now and Tegoshi’s hair grew longer so he would sometimes put it into a small ponytail which made him took even more feminine than usual. When he smiled mischievously, he looked like some kind of forest sprite rather than a boy.
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I really love this! Your choice of words, the plot, the characterizations. I love them. I especially love this part:
It was a bit later, as they cuddled together simply enjoying each other’s warmth when Tegoshi spoke.
“B +”
“What?”
“You get a B+.” Shige’s face must have looked so incredulous that Tegoshi laughed.
“If I give you an ‘A’ you won’t have any motivation to work harder.” Tegoshi’s eyes looked mischievous and Shige leaned in to kiss that smirk off his face. “That’s the spirit.”
I can't wait for the next chapter...
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So sweet~ I can't wait until chapter 3
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