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[sydneylover150]

Author: sydneylover150
Title: (I've Cross the Rubicon) Burned the Bridge Behind Me
Spoilers: Whac-A-Mole and speculation (kinda) of why House is the way he is.
Rating: PG-13ish to be safe
Summery: House's thoughts during the argument in Wilson's office. 
Warning: its poetry.
A/N: Please review. I had to get this out before the depression (, reality,

Comments

[shortstuff8379]

Ohhhhh, I love this. To pieces. Its...so honest. Very, very House.

One note regarding "any ways": I think that it should be "anyway", as I don't think that "any ways" is a word. I might be wrong, though. My brain is fried from this episode. :D:D:D

But again, I loved it. *mems*

[sydneylover150]

*smiles shyly* Thank you. The only reason I used any ways was it is a colloquialism of where I'm from. I did not really think of it. Thanks for telling me though. I'll fix it.

Thank you for the compliments and for reading.

[anonymous]

*sobs*

[sydneylover150]

It's okay? *Panics and offers a tissue*

[bloody_refuge]

::starts to sob with anonymous person:: it's so house
::hides under desk::
i knew i shouldnt have come out! after tonites episode im not ready for angst! really im not, i'll end up having a psychotic break! i-just-you..with the house-and the angst!
i miss season 1!!! everything was so simple ( ok well not simple) then! My fragile mind can't handle all the anti!wilson/house drama!

[sydneylover150]

*Offers the whole box of tissues to person under the desk* Thanks. I understand the feeling of hiding underneath the desk. I hope you did not read the postings for post-whac-a-mole because those were bad.

I miss season one too. Trust me I would be a lot happier writing scenes where the two devils are dropping egg bombs on people. Thank you for reviewing though. I appreciate it. I hope you feel better soon. Just have hope for the future kay?

[leavesoflorien]

Disturbingly House.

This reminds me a lot of the lyrics to various mid-nineties bands that I used to be in to while I watched X-Files. (This is a compliment, by the by.) It also reminds me of a World Without Sundays song (Tea in July, specifically).

The last couplet is clever with the parentheses. I also like the transition from 'You want me to...' and 'You wanted me to...' it breaks the poem from the past where Wilson was trying to change things in a more underhanded and manipulative way to the present where everything is falling apart because Wilson couldn't get House to change.

You're right, there are some rough spots, but you have a great base here! I think the two strongest couplets are:

I don't have to listen to you whine and complain
Begging me with your eyes to take the blame

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Because I'm not (ready) going to heal
And I won't play your game.I would suggest playing with capitalization and punctuation. It could adjust the flow a bit. The two couplets I just mentioned are especially strong because of the verbs. Active,

[sydneylover150]

Thank you for the compliments. I thought it was reminiscent of a nineties song too. I love those. Those transitions were something I hoped people would notice.

Thank you for the advice for poetry it is very helpful. Active verbs, got it. Once I have time today to work on it, I'll get to it. Thanks again.

[fayding_fast]

Hi. I thought that this was very powerfully written, indeed. I haven't yet seen any of season 3, but if House is really in a place as cold and dark as this implies, then the man certainly needs a lot of help. I have saved this, I love it.

[sydneylover150]

Thank you. Yes he is in a dark, dark place. Be glad that you have not seen the season yet. This is why your fiction gives me so much comfort. As for help, I worry that even if House receives help that it won't help him.

I know from personal experience (not with drugs but another condition that leaves a person angry, hostile but mostly sad inside when help comes along) that help does not work if the person doesn't truly want it. Hopefully he will. Thank you for meming. ;<)

[fayding_fast]

Ah, I'm sorry to read that you have suffered yourself. From depression, I assume? Obviously, you had the strength to get over it. That partly explains why your poem is so moving, and rings so true, you've been there.

[sydneylover150]

Its okay. Depression yes, but also PTSD which I am still not over due to my internal fighting between with or not I want to remember some horrible things or not. (Thus... House) This poem actually started about me (Which I was writing during the episode)and then it crossed a thin line and became about House. Thank you for your compliments. Hope to see some of your work soon. ;<)