Forced Retreat

[sydneylover150]

Author: sydneylover150 
Title: Forced Retreat 
Prompt: 105. House and Wilson get dragged to the hospital retreat, complete with trust building exercises (and stupid discussion circles - "What type of animal are you?
Summary: House is forced to go on a retreat and drags Wilson along.  
Rating: PG-13 (T)
Pairing: H/W preslash, romantic friendship
Warnings/

Comments

[sydneylover150]

Thanks for the help. I'll edit it after I eat tonight. I'll run it by a beta this weekend again. Don't worry, I'll work on the dialogue. Thanks again. :<)

[lady_w]

This is a happy fic.
The world needs more happy fic. More importantly I need more happy fic, so continue! :D

[sydneylover150]

*laughs* I'll do just that. I think this world needs more happy fic too!

[delphinapterus]

Not a WIP! I'm really curious to see what happens next - the thought of the potential mayhem House could create at a team-building retreat leaves me breathless.
I think this was my favorite line: My best friend is a hyperactive six foot three, five-year-old

[sydneylover150]

*laughs* Sorry I ran out of time due to work and school. I think he is going to have fun torturing the people at the retreat.

I think that is my favorite line two. Trust me, better things are coming soon. Maybe tomorrow, so check back!! ;<)

[evila_elf]

:D
The sentences and the dialogue both flow much better in this fic than in the other one you posted. The boys are so much better when they are nice and relaxed :)
One little nitpick for this....I don't think that House would take his motorcycle (unless you meant his fancy car?) if they were going to a retreat. Too much stuff to pack to be able to take on the cycle.

And I want House to be a good boy so that there will be some fun and frisking later! *kitty-cat eyes*

[sydneylover150]

Thanks for the nitpicking. I'll have to correct that. I meant Wilson had to ride on the bike to get House to go (Cuddy's threats weren't enough)

Yes the dialog flows better in this one. The other one I have to work on. Oh by the way, House will get to have fun with Wilson. Thanks for the review!

[anonymous]

First of all, darn you for making it a WIP! But still, I really like the premise you're building on, and it reads easily for the most part.

Not to nitpick, but this could stand some editing and/or a beta. For instance:

He raised his eyebrow and gave his friend a horrorified look.
Did you mean HORRIFIED?

Wilson brought his left hand up to the bridge of his nose and tried to count to ten as his friend’s lack of humility.
This subordinate clause lacks a verb. If it's meant to be at instead of as, it still doesn't make a whole lot of sense. Are you missing a couple of words?

Other than that, this feels good to read. It's good to have "our boys" back without all the crap the writers keep throwing at us. Keep writing!

[sydneylover150]

Thank you. I will send this to a beta before I post next. I will continue writing. Thanks for the help and I'll make corrections later tonight.