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[sydneylover150]

Author: sydneylover150
Title: Painful Love
Your prompt claim: 182. Wilson learns something about House's childhood.
Summary: Sometimes the most painful thing you have face about the people we love, is their pasts.
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Discussion of sexual abuse.
Spoilers: A reference to a comment House made in Skin Deep.  Set after Safe and All In.

Comments

[sydneylover150]

How do you mean? Do you mean how I know about the subject?

[sydneylover150]

Oh! Sorry, this subject is a little close to my heart. I apologize if I sounded snappish.

I've written fanfiction since I was sixteen (I think....), so for five years. I started writing Buffy and Spike fanfiction. I wrote two father/son stories for Lord of the Rings (Estel[Aragorn]/Elrond), one hinted at slash for Smallville.

I've written original stuff too, but mostly the stuff I have online is poetry. (I have stories in my school journals and stuff.) But I've told and made up stories since I was little. (I just suck at grammar and I have a tracking disorder with my eyes).

*offers a smile* Mostly I like to hint at relationships. I like writing with romantic friendships and pre-slash because I lack experience with relationships. But I try to watch and learn. Did I answer your question? *smiles sheepishly*

[delphinapterus]

This fic is really bothering me. Child abuse, of any kind, is always a hard topic to write about, and one which, given House's history, I think ought to be explored more. That being said, your writing seems rushed - but I really like the plot. If you ever decide to revise it, I know I'd love to read something long and plot about how House and Wilson deal with this.

I'm a little surprised that House is able to open up to Wilson as easily as he does. I think the dialog might flow more naturally if you use more contractions. Given that abuse survivors have an extremely hard time talking about it to friends and family, the diary is an excellent way to have it be discovered.

[sydneylover150]

It is really a hard topic for me to write about, but it was something I had to do. Yes, the story does seem a little rushed didn't it? I think I will be revising it over the course of the next few days to the next few weeks. I don't know how far I would expand it, because I have to figure out how to heal myself before, I think, I can fully write about healing. Who knows this might help.

More contractions? Give me an example. When I talk to the therapist I ramble and talk in short, avoiding statements, so any help you could give me would be great. Yes, abuse survivors do have a hard time talking to family and friends. The idea of rejection or disbelief of their experience makes them unwilling to talk about it. (Sorry psychologist mode.) I think I might have House yell what he did and then take it back at the park or talk solely about Jake. Anyhow, thank you for your thoughts about the diary. I thought it was appropriate.

Again thank you for any help you can give and thank you for commenting. :<)

[delphinapterus]

I don't think I made this as clear as I ought to have: I liked it and I would defiantly like to read more of this or anything else you write

[sydneylover150]

Now it is clear. Suddenly I realize I shouldn't write fanfiction after I've written history and psych papers (not allowed to use contractions). Trust me, your suggestions are very clear once examples have been pointed out. Thanks again. And I knew you liked it (or I had a feeling...). Anyhow thank you!!

[luthien13]

I'm no fiction writer, but I did find this to be a very powerful fic, and I agree with the above comment in that I'd love to read more.
I do have a small note, however: "Pedophiled" isn't a word. "A victim of paederasty", perhaps?

[sydneylover150]

Thank you. And thanks for the note. I had a feeling it wasn't a word. I just couldn't think of an alternative. I think I like victim of paederasty though. It works. I'll see what I can do about expanding this. Thanks again. :<)

[luthien13]

How about the word "molested?"

--tbg

[sydneylover150]

*smiles* That works too! Thank you too!