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an asthma story
Nov 12, 2009 00:32
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November 12 2009, 14:40:33 UTC
Brilliant!:)
It wanders a bit with the "boy" metaphor in stanza three (just knock out the word "boy," I'd think) and stanza 4 and 5 don't do much for the overall theme, but otherwise this is wonderful.
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It wanders a bit with the "boy" metaphor in stanza three (just knock out the word "boy," I'd think) and stanza 4 and 5 don't do much for the overall theme, but otherwise this is wonderful.
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