YAH! My first Yaoi fic EVER! Name: For the Sake of Jenova Rating: M Pairing: Tseng /Kadaj (Mentioned OCs/Loz, OCs/Yazoo) Warnings: Non-con, yaoi (duh), Citrus
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Your writing is fine although I would suggest that you use double spacing between your paragraphs as it makes it easier to read.
However I think you should mark this story as an AU (alternate universe) as not only is every character out of character but in Advent Children, Shin-Ra had pretty much been destroyed (so there wouldn't be any squads of elite SOLDIERS) and Tseng as well as Elena had been so badly tortured by the remnants that they weren't able to fight until the very end of the movie.
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However I think you should mark this story as an AU (alternate universe) as not only is every character out of character but in Advent Children, Shin-Ra had pretty much been destroyed (so there wouldn't be any squads of elite SOLDIERS) and Tseng as well as Elena had been so badly tortured by the remnants that they weren't able to fight until the very end of the movie.
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