Comments | synecdoche: original fic: a city, like lace

synecdoche

original fic: a city, like lace

Mar 24, 2009 22:35

a city, like lace

pg-13, original fiction, 1828 words. for round one of inrevelations. enjoy?

( Always in the bathroom her lips look scarlet, garish. )

original fic

Comments 7

theepiccek March 25 2009, 05:22:05 UTC

Wow! Even in a blackout, she can find her way home. She’s done it before, too many times already. the whole thing was amazing, but this line caught my eye.

Fantastic job!

synecdoche March 31 2009, 11:34:27 UTC

Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed. ♥

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synecdoche March 31 2009, 11:35:00 UTC

Thanks so much! It makes me so happy that you enjoyed -- I love your writing so, so much. ♥

memories_child March 26 2009, 20:52:49 UTC

I love this. Really well written.

synecdoche March 31 2009, 11:35:43 UTC

Thanks! I'm so glad you enjoyed. ♥

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synecdoche March 31 2009, 11:36:21 UTC

Aww, thanks! I'm taking a creative writing class focused on place, so I've been trying to incorporate more details. I'm so, so glad you enjoyed. ♥

lunarla225 April 1 2009, 19:55:45 UTC

So, clearly I FAIL on the uptake. I read this when you first posted it, like, last week, but I didn't have the chance to consider it and write a thoughtful comment. I remember feeling knocked out, maybe it was all that gorgeous detail. You have a way with atmosphere that's really amazing here. And New York City is my city, and you got it.

Love how the war is mentioned but never fully explained. It's amazing how you can make something that has the power to completely overwhelm a piece so understated yet still very real. "Even in a blackout, she can find her way home. She's done it before, too many times before" is complete brilliance. It says so, so, so much with so few words. Brava.

Thank you for writing this for me.