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syrensoul_red

A State Of Grace (6b/?)

Dec 06, 2009 01:04

A STATE OF GRACE 6b
SyrenSoul_Red

Pairing: Gabrielle/Xena (Classic)
Fandom: Xena: Warrior Princess
Rating: This part M(15+) for coarse language and violence. Overall, NC-18.
Summary: Set about a year-and-a-half post-finale. Gabrielle is back in Greece after her time in Egypt. She's headed to Thebes to watch Sappho perform. Xena, as always, is at ( Read more... )

xena, gabrielle, fanfiction, warrior, a state of grace, femslash

Comments 11

arcticponkey December 5 2009, 15:15:00 UTC

Oh my god, how intense! Poor Gabby, she's so lost :/
Again, wonderfully written! I'm really kinda speechless right now (but that's a good thing!) so there's nothing left to say for me - except for a beg maybe: please keep going! ... :)

EDIT:
Forgot to mention that I love the whole "life is a joke" part. So true to Gabrielle's situation.
And also the repetitions, that show how hopeless she really is. Oh man, this chap is so intense ... D: great job!

syrensoul_red December 6 2009, 05:44:01 UTC

Wow - thanks, sweet Ponkey! Yes, it is fairly intense - I was struggling a lot after the last chapter, and didn't know how to tell the story to Sappho. Then I realised that none of us really knew the story, so I had to sit down and figure out how it went. And voila! Flashback. I couldn't avoid Egypt forever. This just flowed.

As for the life/death is a joke part - I wanted to show the despair that comes before the anger, and I'm glad that came across. However much the XWP writers wanted to pretend it would all be okay, la di da, I think that's a steaming pile of dung.

Next part is in progress. And thanks x

sportysmurf December 5 2009, 15:45:04 UTC

Well if Gabrielle isn't confused, I sure am! A ghost, not a ghost, figment, manifestation of her mind...? My head is spinning and I'm not the one who got all beat up and everything! Ergo - please continue so I can figure out what is really happening!

syrensoul_red December 6 2009, 05:45:32 UTC

inorite? The whole ghost thing was so open to interpretation, I wanted it to be really clear what was going on. Of course, confusion always comes before clarity. I hope the next part will really flesh things out for you :)

sapphicwarrior December 5 2009, 19:36:28 UTC

wow that was an intense update! Really well written!
Looking forward to more!

syrensoul_red December 6 2009, 05:46:01 UTC

Thanks, dear Sapph - more to come very soon! :D

sr_m_grammatica December 5 2009, 23:29:29 UTC

Ah! So we learn now when and how Gabrielle learns that Xena is a ghost and not a symptom of her own grief-induced madness. I really like how you have the old healer reveal this fact to Gabrielle. "Oh, let her do it! Maybe then I can get some sleep." HA! Brilliant. I hope those bad men didn't hurt her horse.

Lovely, my child, lovely.

SMG

syrensoul_red December 6 2009, 05:49:07 UTC

Thank you, dear lady.

Yes, the old healer is a gem, isn't she? She dawdled in yesterday morning and gave me a right talking to and I had no choice but to put her into the story. We'll be seeing more from her in the next chapter.

As for the horse, I'm glad you mentioned him: No horses were hurt in the production of this story. He will be seen again. He has important things to deliver ;)

Thank you again. x

revolos55 December 12 2009, 16:14:37 UTC

“You have to fight!” Xena’s face filled the crack between her arm and the grit, stared imploringly at her. “You have to get up. Fight them!” - Man, that's gotta be horrible for Xena

Xena occupied a space in her mind with the steadiness one would expect of the warrior, even in death. There was nothing frantic about it; it was unlike anything the Furies had ever inflicted. It was deceptive in its ordinariness: A dead woman who moved, and thought, and conversed exactly the way she had in life. - Neat

“You didn’t fight to live,” she continued, not listening. “When you had the chance to keep going, you gave up. I don’t see why I should be any different.” / Blue eyes welled and sparkled like the ocean and Gabrielle felt seasick again. / “Go away, Xena. Go back to whichever part of my mind is broken and stay there. You’re not good company.” / The madness jerked back as though it had been slapped and Gabrielle closed her eyes. Her tears fell onto the sand of her mattress and seeped away. - Ouch!

Gabrielle reached beneath her body to where ( ... )

syrensoul_red December 13 2009, 08:17:39 UTC

:DDDD Biggest grin ever. Geez, that flashback had some stuff in it, didn't it? I'm so glad it worked out - I'm often iffy about flashbacks, re-writing the past or wrapping up motivations in a little bow, but I think it worked okay and was necessary.

Can't wait to see your other responses.

Thanks, as always, Rev x