The Secret of Greatness, part two (Chimerical: M)

[syrinx_fic]

The Secret of Greatness
Chimerical
Maugre: in spite of
Rating: R (language)

Continued from part one.

Comments

[sightseek]

Thumbs up! Hence the icon, haha! ;)

So happy to see a new story (and two parts, too!)! Once again, you've shown your skill at taking a canon moment and turning it on its head!

And you chose to elaborate on the classic "He's not my boyfriend" scene! Loved it! I remember you wrote about this scene in one of your earlier posts at the Whitebrook blog. Loved your comments then, too!

And of course, the story:
Once again you shine at dialogue!

I really like how you developed the little triangle between Mike/Ash/Brad.

And the moments between Brad and Ash! I like how you are able to strike the balance between (sexual) tension, conflict, canon moments, and making Ash and Brad seem like a natural fit.

[sightseek]

* Facepalm! *

This is the icon I meant! ;)

[syriinx]

Aw, thank you! Those "he's not my boyfriend" moments have irked me for what feels like forever. It feels a little wrong to push them together so early in canon (the age difference, I guess, still being a little less than optimal), but that book was just oozing sexual tension and I literally almost couldn't stand it the first time I re-read it for the blog. I think I had brain breakage while I was reading it. I'm surprised a fic didn't come along sooner!

I'm glad you liked it!

[mask_and_mirror]

"Maddock and I have an understanding..."

I loooove this, I actually giggled to myself when I read this line. That is pure canon Brad.

I also was struck by your characterization of Townsend Prince in this one. As weird as it is to go into character arcs with regards to horses... well, I really like how you did it here. It's very subtle and I didn't catch onto it until this second part, but I appreciate it so much. It's definitely something that is lost every once in a while in canon.

Also, fiiiight scene! Or, well, almost fight scene. Seriously, though, I really like the idea of Brad and Mike squaring off once and for all.

[syriinx]

Thanks! I have a huge soft spot for Townsend Prince. In my mind, he lived on to lead a fulfilling life at stud, siring babies that were awesome and gave the Wonder descendants something to quiver about. Why he was killed off remains a mystery to me.

I am also pretty tempted to write a full-fledged fight scene. Maybe I should stretch those muscles...

Glad you liked it!

[alexp0526]

I think I left a review on Fanfiction, but while I love all of your work, Chimerical has some of my favorite bits of your work in it. I hope you keep writing more! On a side note, I'd really like to read The Far Side Of the World et al (reread, really, as I think I read at least TFSOTW on WBF but not sure), but since you don't list me as a friend it won't let me. I added you as a friend, but since I really don't do anything with LJ I don't know if it sent you a notification when I did that or not, so if it didn't (or if it did), I'd love it if you could list me as a friend so I could read those.

[syriinx]

Hi there! Sorry for the belated response! I'd be glad to friend you do this journal. Then you can read away. :)