There's a lot of me inside you, maybe you're afraid to see.

Jul 21, 2007 19:02

Feeling a lot better today.

The only reason I wrote this entry was to share some stuff I have been writing. Granted, I was never that good of a writer to begin with, but I haven't written anything in 5 years or so. And within the past week I've written 2 poems..so I guess the writing bug has bitten me, or something.

The Folly of Her Action

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sigil July 22 2007, 03:34:30 UTC
I'm still thinking over the first one - it's more complex than The Silence.

Regarding The Silence - the first verse ... I think the meter is a little off somewhere, although I cannot put my finger on it. The second verse is pefect. Perfect. Very well done.

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takemeaway July 22 2007, 22:19:38 UTC
I think it's the first two lines, really. They seem..too long, perhaps. I'm not quite sure, either. Thanks, though. The second part just popped into my head really quick..the parts I have to come up with later *always* sound forced and a tad awkward, I find. But I do admit the last word used to be "home" instead of "away"; however, all I could think of to rhyme was "gnome" and "foam". I haven't had a crush on David the gnome in years so I thought I outta change it. ;-)

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