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[talkstocoyotes]

Part 2: Wedding Night

Previous Chapters:

Chapter 1: http://talkstocoyotes.livejournal.com/392.html

Chapter 2: http://talkstocoyotes.livejournal.com/523.html

Chapter 3: ( Read more... )

Comments

[ky77ccl]

Thanks so much for the update!
I like the way things are developing, with each chapter I get some answers, but also form a lot more questions. e.g. Why is David hesitant to mention Nathan - pain too raw, unsure how Ennis will react (Ennis knows about Nathan right?, but I don't suppose David knows that Ennis knows?)?

Of course interested to see how Ennis will react to the letter, and I'm curious when Jack might make another 'visit'...

No need to answer anything... I'm just thinking out loud!
Again, thanks for the update!
Kelly (notBastet)

[talkstocoyotes]

Wow, you read it while I was posting it!

There are a number of reasons David doesn't mention Nathan -- not sure how Ennis will react is a big part of it. All he's aware of so far that Ennis knows is the background he's told him.

There's another chapter being posted today; Jack will have a major role in the chapter or three after that.

[rainattimes]

reading your story...I was hoping to understand why Ennis felt Jack's presence at Jr.'s wedding...later I thought you would explain how David and Ennis hooked up....now I have no idea what to think.... (you're good)

[talkstocoyotes]

I don't mean to be leaving people not knowing what to think; it's just that both Ennis and my writing are progressing so slowly! This story is based on the film version of Ennis, who was just starting to lift his head and look around in the last scene. At this point, a little over four months have gone by since Alma Jr.'s visit to tell him she's getting married, not too long for movie-Ennis to be knowingly associating with someone else who's 'queer.'

There are some big changes coming up in the next chapters for Ennis, and it's necessary to lay a pretty good foundation for them to be believable. Unfortunately, my being able to post only a chapter or two at a time does make it very slow going.

[my_lil_darlin]

I'm enjoying reading the long, slow healing of Ennis's poor hurtin' heart here. The Bible tells us to "choose life", and I see him doing that, slow but sure, in little ways.

And the thing with Mrs. Twist (thank God for the sister in Oregon...she can leave that God forsaken house in the wilderness of Lightning Flat and that Old Bastard husband), offering Ennis Jack's ashes to scatter. "The one he loved best of everyone in the world". Ahhhh, so beautiful.

[louisev]

ah, the ashes! Ennis gets to go to Lightning Flat after all. Maybe his fantasies of Jack were to get him up there at the right moment.

Very good family interaction scene there... not exactly strife between Ennis and Alma, but a realistic tension over "little girl" Jenny and "big city" Denver.

[l_rabbit]

I am so glad that you posted this excellent and absorbing story and made the previous chapters available for us to read. I had not read it before, so I'm reading it from the beginning. Since I often read Brokeback fanfics to unwind before going to bed, I am often too groggy to comment. Just want to let you know that although I don't comment very much, I am following and enjoying the fics. This one is intriguing, insightful and well-written.

Thanks for writing,
Leslie

[talkstocoyotes]

Thanks for reading! Ennis goes through quite a few changes in this story, and gets a few surprises in the next few chapters.